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Hi Michelle, | |||
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. Since you've only begun developing the "History" section, I'll limit my comments to that; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the other sections: | |||
* You might restructure the "History" section so that the "Founding" subsection comes first; then create additional subsections to organize your account of AI's history since the early 1960s. | |||
* Most importantly, your encyclopedia entry should be an explanation of what the organization is all about ''in your own words''. Way too much of what appears there now is drawn verbatim from Amnesty International's website ([http://www.amnesty.org/en/who-we-are/history]). | |||
[[User:Shamira Gelbman|Shamira Gelbman]] 13:45, 5 October 2009 (UTC) | |||
==Second (peer) evaluation comments== | |||
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Revision as of 07:45, 5 October 2009
First (instructor) evaluation comments
Hi Michelle,
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. Since you've only begun developing the "History" section, I'll limit my comments to that; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the other sections:
- You might restructure the "History" section so that the "Founding" subsection comes first; then create additional subsections to organize your account of AI's history since the early 1960s.
- Most importantly, your encyclopedia entry should be an explanation of what the organization is all about in your own words. Way too much of what appears there now is drawn verbatim from Amnesty International's website ([1]).
Shamira Gelbman 13:45, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
Second (peer) evaluation comments
Categories:
- Article with Definition
- Politics Category Check
- Eduzendium Category Check
- Developing Articles
- Nonstub Articles
- Internal Articles
- Politics Developing Articles
- Politics Nonstub Articles
- Politics Internal Articles
- Eduzendium Developing Articles
- Eduzendium Nonstub Articles
- Eduzendium Internal Articles
- Politics Underlinked Articles
- Underlinked Articles
- Eduzendium Underlinked Articles