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==About this page==
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This page's role is to preserve a copy of Biology Approved Version 1 editing discussions and to provide key information about the current approved version
'''Housekeeping edits with respect to approvals'''
====For editing discussions to improve the current version jump to [[Talk:Biology/Draft]] (click) ====
:*'''About this page'''
====Current approved version====
The first section of this archive represents various discussions specific to the approval process from version 1 to 1.2.1. Section two represents article specific discussion.
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Annotation of this action documented here by [[User:David Tribe|David Tribe]] 02:54, 4 February 2007 (CST)
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==WARNING==
:*'''WARNING'''
Edits to templates and figure primary files may affect approved page appearance [[User:David Tribe|David Tribe]] 21:51, 26 January 2007 (CST)
:Edits to templates and figure primary files may affect approved page appearance [[User:David Tribe|David Tribe]] 21:51, 26 January 2007 (CST)
== Biology Version 1. Article Plan, Policies, and Decisions ==
::*Biology Version 1. Article Plan, Policies, and Decisions


* ''Here we need to summarize the conclusions arrived at in the archived discussions, in a bulleted list.''
::::* ''Here we need to summarize the conclusions arrived at in the archived discussions, in a bulleted list.''
* ''This set of policies should go at the top of the talk page.''
::::* ''This set of policies should go at the top of the talk page.''


Folks, can you fill in the above?  I.e., in bulleted points, what should we glean from the discussions so far?  What have the editors decided?  '''Still waiting for this.'''  Can you make any ''generalizations''?  You don't need to report everything that was decided, because that would take nearly as long as the talk archives themselves.  But what about the structure of the article?  The style?  Things that writers need to know that might not be obvious simply by reading the article?  Please try your hand at this. --[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 17:13, 25 January 2007 (CST)
Folks, can you fill in the above?  I.e., in bulleted points, what should we glean from the discussions so far?  What have the editors decided?  '''Still waiting for this.'''  Can you make any ''generalizations''?  You don't need to report everything that was decided, because that would take nearly as long as the talk archives themselves.  But what about the structure of the article?  The style?  Things that writers need to know that might not be obvious simply by reading the article?  Please try your hand at this. --[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 17:13, 25 January 2007 (CST)


*[[Talk:Biology archive 1]]
 
==Edits leading to the first approval==
===Proposed Article Plan===
a) purpose: a true and accurate explanation of the subject that is an inspiring introduction for an interested user to explore the topic both on (1) CZ and (2) the web. To introduce a few selected major issues in biology -like (1) evolution as opposed to belief in religion's depiction of creation of man.
 
b) style/intended readership level. Simple but elegant language. As a flagship entry point into Biology, this article should be written at a consciously lay level. Keep jargon out and use natural language wherever possible. Maintain a consistency and coherence of style within this article.
 
b) length. Short and sweet; An essay that is readable and enjoyable alone, and which looks good when printed out.
 
c) things needed urgently: suggestions for illustrations, or for particular examples, interesting in their own right, understandable to lay readers, illustrative of the excitement about biology, from different perspectives (impact of biological science on our lives and the environment - the Green revolution? cloning? molecular biology and understanding the building blocks of life? Ecosystems, evolution, genetic engineering, brain imaging?
 
This article cannot and should not attempt to be comprehensive. It doesn't matter what is left out, only that what is included is interesting and inspiring to a lay audience, accurate for an expert reader, beautiful in words, images and layout to both, and that paths to follow are signposted. How this is to be done is not clear, I personally do not like lists; I'd rather see a link to a list here, and would still rather see a link to a "map". As this article should contain nothing seriously disputed, the need for references is minimal.
[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 06:06, 10 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Talk==
Dr. Sculerati--that's quite bold, to simply dive in and rewrite the thing from scratch.  I like it!
 
However, there is one problem, that anyone (not just you) could help with.  It is that there are many links from the original biology article that no longer exist.  That doesn't necessarily mean that the pages linked-to are orphans, but what it does mean is that there is no longer such an easy way into those topics from the article.  What I suggest, then, if we completely scrap an old article, is that we keep a list of old links at the bottom of the article, and make sure they are incorporated into the article as appropriate.  (Of course, ''some'' links probably don't need to appear anywhere on the page at all.  But the names of subdisciplines, yes.) --[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 02:40, 1 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Fields list==
I'd like to comment, but I do not know how far developed you consider this to be. Your list of fields is partial, but is it more helpful to contribute more now or to wait until you have done s--in what will undoubtedly be a more systematic way?20:47, 2 November 2006 (CST)
==Reply to above by Nancy==
I think I finished the basic summary, though it sure needs polishing. I would like to see it remain short. I am currently working on History and Development of Biology section. This is likely to go on for a while, and likely to stay in [[Biology]] only in outline form with a touch of narrative and then get broken off and moved to its own article. My plan is to merge it what currently exists under that title, if I can. As I get to major figures in Biology, I have been reviewing and making [[CZ Live]] their biography articles. If you look at [[ Anton Van Luuenhook]], you'll see that I came up with a header Biography section that contains the names discussion, and a second header with place of birth, date of birth - death. I'd love for the text in those headers to be in a slightly but significantly smaller font.  Back to [[Biology]], I would so appreciate it if somebody would address Larry's concerns above. Would you be so kind as to add to Distinct Academic Disciplines within Biology (Partial List)? Unless you object, I'd appreciate keeping to the curent style- very brief and general description of each in plain language, including an internal link. P.S. who are you? regards, [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 11:21, 3 November 2006 (CST)
::It my have been me. But  I agree that it is too early to decide on
what will be the useful links. Another  qy about the links is whether they go only 1 link down, e.g. just to Zoology, or to Mammals. For a topic like this, it might be useful to have a page showing the hierarchy of articles,  though you'd need several since they intersect--maybe we have someone is is good with 3D graphics?  I'm going to try to do groups from different aspects in Zoology so I can see what works, but I'm going to put it in words first, before I do a single list. Probably will take till the 15th, because I'll be away most of the time till then.
::A related question is whether there should be somewhere to put the "meet" of the topic--do we do little articles all the way down, or do we stop at e.g.,  Mammals, and do something more comprehensive. Perhaps we've more or less come to the conclusion that the top level is not the place, if only because the article would be too long.[[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 22:13, 5 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Style==
I have made quite a few edits and have a few points to address regarding those edits.  First, what is citizendium planning on doing with respect to style issues?  I noticed this page has already started drifting away from those established in wikipedia.  Was that intentional? I have made some changes to the titles that conform to the MoS in wikipedia. I have also established a reference section at the bottom so citations can be added.
 
I add some content back, such as the classification section. I hope that is OK.  Along those lines, I have also restored many of internal links that were lost during the initial reorganization.  Maybe we do not want to discuss homeostasis or even link to it but we can see how the article develops with time.
 
With respect to the lists I am not sure which is the best way to go. For the topics have add all three possible routes in the one section, we need to decide the best way to present such information. Three possible choices include: 1) having a footer template and nothing in the article; 2) Having a comprehensive list in the article; or 3) having a narrative on the topics with a reference to a separately maintained list on a different page. [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 05:02, 7 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Biology and philosophy==
I moved the following paragraph from the introduction:
::Biology asks some of same questions found in religion and philosophy, questions such as "How did life begin?", and "What features seperate something that is alive from something that is not alive?". The biologist approaches these questions using the [[scientific method]]. Therefore, the biologists answers to such questions differ from the answers found in philosophical and religious works. Whether scientific thinking about such great issues as the origin of life on earth is compatable with religious doctrine is itself a contentious issue. Some great thinkers, such as the physicist [[Albert Einstein]], have found no real conflict on the varying teachings in science and religion, but consider Divinity and the Natural Universe to be one and the same (see [[Albert Einstein]] for detailed discussion with references).
This seems to be a little off track for the introduction but as the whole article is not currently layed out I cannot tell how it will relate to future content. To me it seems like material that should be in the body of the article itself. Also, biologists barely touch on the subject of ''"how did life begin"'', so it seems a little too much weight for an overview article (assuming you are planning to flesh this out in the main text). [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 13:38, 7 November 2006 (CST)
 
Chris, I find the paragraph on the philosophy of the biological approach, elegantly written. After all, what separates biology
from intelligent design or religion? I am new to CZ so please forgive any lapses in protocol. What inspired Watson & Crick was
an attempt to understand what constitutes life.  So this is engaging, and inspiring to the reader. So just as where did the universe evolve from inspires the physicist, the understanding of what constitutes life is the ultimate question in Biology.
As Feynman stated, I wonder why, I wonder why I wonder.
 
Biology asks some of same questions found in religion and philosophy, questions such as "How did life begin?", and "What features seperate something that is alive from something that is not alive?". The biologist approaches these questions using the [[scientific method]]. Therefore, the biologists answers to such questions differ from the answers found in philosophical and religious works. Whether scientific thinking about such great issues as the origin of life on earth is compatable with religious doctrine is itself a contentious issue. Some great thinkers, such as the physicist [[Albert Einstein]], have found no real conflict on the varying teachings in science and religion, but consider Divinity and the Natural Universe to be one and the same (see [[Albert Einstein]] for detailed discussion with references).
Arnold R. Rabin,MSEE,M.D.
--[[User:Arnold Rabin|Arnold Rabin]] 04:23, 8 November 2006 (CST)
:My problem is that it romanticises biology into something it is not. Very few biologists ask "How did life begin?" or "What is life?" What they routinely ask is how does it work. Or with respect to watson and Crick what is the structure. I know this sounds boring but it is the reality of the work. [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 08:28, 8 November 2006 (CST)
 
Many do not subscribe to the idea that biology is boring.  An analogy might be that computer science is boring because most programmers write code or algorithms to solve discrete problems. Much of it is mundane. However in the hierarchy of CS is
Kurzweil, von Neumann. So when I look up computer science, it can read a) the study of the hardware and software used to solve problems that would take enormous amounts of time if done manually. b) the study and application of circuits and algorithms to engage in problem solving; the ultimate goal of which is to achieve a  level of problem solving than is not possible by man alone. I understand your difficulty with "What is life?" in a practical sense. We certainly ask "What is life?", when looking at phage,
DNA , RNA viruses and now Preons, we rethink what is life.
 
Chris, I agree that this is a matter of style. Can we be engaging without seeming to be unrealistic or trite. In fact, in my opinion, it is engaging writing that can set CZ apart. "I looked up --- the other day and was blown away by the elegance and
incite of its editors. Since Larry's goal is to set CZ apart because of our expertise, these discussions are powerful. With
editors with great expertise, this can be the most accurate and the most engaging and welcome source. Maybe we can get Larry
Sanger's input on style as well as that of science editors. After all it is iteration that will make CZ a great reference.
In addition, the author cites Einstein inaccurately. What Einstein implied was that the mystery of life or creation of the universe was not incompatible with belief in a higher entity, he did not subscribe to religious dogma. As an aside, Einstein also stated "God does not throw dice" when confronted with quantum theory. He was wrong.--[[User:Arnold Rabin|Arnold Rabin]] 14:58, 8 November 2006 (CST)
 
:I am definitely not implying that biology is boring. How a cell functions and reproduces itself is fascinating and mind boggingly (is that a word?) elegant. On the other hand we need to keep the intro based in reality. When biologist ask a question such as "What is life?" is it really any different to the philosphers? We are in awe at the biology but I don't think we are using the scientific method to specifically address that question. And if we are going to cite a physicist, I would have thought Erwin Schrodinger would be more appropriate. I will add, i am not trying to black ball this paragraph but I think it needs to be discussed and through collaboration it can be improved. [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 15:30, 8 November 2006 (CST)
 
::I think articles should have a personality and be interestingly written.  It's possible to have a neutral article that is written in a lively way. --[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 15:43, 8 November 2006 (CST)
:::I agree with this sentiment, I just thought the way it was written was a little too much (just my opinion of course). While you here, is there a manual of style?  I am noticing editors here changing the stardard style of wikipedia. An example would be capitalising all words in section titles. I have nothing against that style, however, since all these articles have been scrapped from wikipedia changing that style will entail changing every article to be consistent. Have you decided how to address this issue yet? [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 15:58, 8 November 2006 (CST)
::::After poking around a bit i found the following in the forums http://textop.org/smf/index.php?board=24.0
::::So from what i can gather there is no set style manual in place. Is that correct? [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 16:20, 8 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Intro Changes==
I am by no means a biology expert, but from a layout perspective, I feel like the etymology doesn't belong at the top of the page.  I tossed it atop the history section, because it seems like it should be there.  I feel like the intro should be something ''simpler'', something completely straightforward and clear to everybody, and the "Biology is the science of life" paragraph does that perfectly.  I also added the third sentence to fill it out a bit, and because I think it is worth noting that Biology is a major field of science. --[[User:ZachPruckowski|ZachPruckowski]] 15:23, 8 November 2006 (CST)
== Reply to Chris on Style and to comment on Einstein made by another==
Chris, I wrote the "romantic" text which is absolutely accurate, scientifically. We are not in the business of making prose sound conventional, it's truth we are after, and the clearer and more interesting the prose the better.
Einstein is not inaccurately quoted. Yes, his remark about the statitical nature of quantum mechanics being unappealing in light of his idea of God is often referred to, but there is more. Click the link to the Einstein article. He clearly stated that he believed in "Spinoza's God", of the mechanism of the Universe. In other words, that the laws of the universe ARE God. Thoughtful religious people understand that the nature of God is not clear to man, and can find a resolution between science and religion, sometimes, through this viewpoint. [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 19:09, 8 November 2006 (CST)
:The reason I changed the prose was because I found the original hard to understand. So i would debate whether they are clear and more interesting. I am not trying to be negative but bring a new perspective. This is meant to be a collaborative effort afterall.  The romanticised part I pasted to the talk page. Why wouldn't Schrödinger's "[[What is Life? (Schrödinger)|What is Life?]]" treatise be more appropriate for the intro with respect to big picture thinking? Einstein seems to be several steps away from biology with respect to his comments. [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 19:33, 8 November 2006 (CST)
::On a pragamatic level, adding to the article by extending the unfinished segments would further the enterprise. [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 20:48, 8 November 2006 (CST)
:::That is true but there is no reason we cannot discuss the current content too. [[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 20:51, 8 November 2006 (CST)
As we are trying to educate a world audience, touching on such issues as the potential conflict between science and religion seems worthwhile. I believe that the question of "what is life?" lies at the very heart of biology, and that portraying the work of the "average biologist" is not the point. In fact, that reduction of everything to the most average is one of the biggest problems with WP- errors are reduced by constant editing but so is excellence. Now, back to Einstein. I believe that many religious people distrust biology because of fears about going against their faith. Einstein actually addressed this issue. Others may have addressed it better - but Einstein rings a big bell in minds across the planet and that's part of the considered reason for this choice. It's good to discuss, I am glad to be part of the work. You see, I see it in romantic terms - putting together a compendium of knowlege! To do such a thing we must be bold, but when there is so much to do, we best work together and advance the mission. We, and generations to come, will have infinite time to refine each paragraph. I hope, anyway! regards,[[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 21:01, 8 November 2006 (CST)
:Nancy, I agree with should work together but [http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Biology&diff=100002348&oldid=100002296 this series of edits] you made is not furthering the progress of this page. You have reverted back to your original version and in the process lost many stylistic changes that are important. Wikilinks are gone for one. I think these are early days here and there is little traffic but you should be willing to discuss differences on the talk page.  Just reverting things back to your old version is not very inviting from a collaborative perspective. Personally, I am not particularly bothered to fight this one out but as more people get involved you will find that other editors will change your edits too. This is encouraged and usually after a few back and forth edits the articles are better not worse.
:With respect to portraying an ''average biologists perspective'' that is hardly the issue here. The changes i made were minor with respect to the wording. Admitedly I cut the religion paragraph but that is because I think it is not suitable for the introduction. What is the intention of this article?  To give an overview of biology or to debate the philosophy of biology?
:It may be true that Einstein rings a bell across the planet, but what does that have to do with biology? Don't you think it will confuse people more than get them excited?[[User:Chris day|Chris day]] 21:14, 8 November 2006 (CST)
 
== Article planning ==
 
I don't pretend to have a view on what's being discussed above, but I would like to say that an essential function of CZ is for editors to come to agree upon a set of guidelines for particular articles.  This article is illustrates the need to focus on that function, because the article will be examined and changed (probably) by ''many'' authors and editors.  Some clearly-stated principles are, therefore, desperately needed, or else the article will be endlessly changed endlessly by people with very different ideas about the function of this sort of article.  It seems to me the efficient way to agree on a set of guidelines is to separate out various contentious questions, discuss them individually, and agree to reach an agreement, i.e., discuss with a view to developing a consensus.  We ought to make use of a "dispute resolution" process only as a last resort, I think.  By the way, I think every article should have a threaded forum attached.  What we might do, in lieu of that, is set up the [http://smf.citizendium.org CZ Forums] with a bunch of discipline-specific boards, and then let people link from talk pages to those boards.
 
Over the coming weeks and months, I propose that we draft some succinctly-worded policies that describe our best practices.  The jumping-off place for finding those policies will be [[CZ:Project Home]]. --[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 00:36, 9 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Comment on Approach==
Congratulations to Nancy on diving in and starting afresh; I think a start like this is exactly what is needed to focus the issues. I think it will be easier for others to chip in if we can see where the article is going. I'd suggest maybe that Nancy proposes on this page an article plan, stating the purpose as she sees it, but including perhaps the following  -
 
a) purpose: ''to act as a gateway into other articles? To advertise high points from other CZ articles with selected links and images?''
 
b) style/intended readership level. ''As a flagship entry point into Biology I think it's appropriate to keep this article at a consciously lay level. Keep jargon out and use natural language wherever possible?''
 
b) length. ''Short and sweet? An essay that is readable and enjoyable alone?That looks good when printed out? It might therefore be that the links and references should be kept sparse.''
 
c) things needed urgently ''suggestions for illustrations, or for examples?''
 
Maybe the only links should be to the next hierarchy of articles, or maybe the hierarchy should be displayed here as a box with links, and excluded otherwise?. WP loves links, but they clutter an article, and maybe this should be kept as clean as possible. I especially feel that this particular article should '''not''' include external links - this is a gateway to CZ biology, not the world. Leave the external links to the subarticles.
 
I think this draft goes too fast from the lay to the technical, and that Classification should definitely go elsewhere. I like the idea of selecting a few examples (maybe some historical, some contemporary technological perhaps -transgenics?- some molecular (DNA structure), and yes in particular examples there might be technical terms, but so long as the examples are self contained (i.e. skippable), then they don't need to be fully explained for the article to make sense.
 
It might be worth considering giving the article a little different focus; too many of the introductory remarks sound too trite, even for a lay readership. I think that what has fascinated people and what makes this fascination different from their interest in say cars, rocks or alcohol, is their fascination by ''life'' itself - the enduring big question is, what is life?
[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 04:06, 9 November 2006 (CST)
 
 
==Nancy's Plan==
 
I really was just trying to make a "short and sweet" article on a major page that would be (1) a true and accurate explanation of the subject in (2) inspiring and simple language that might (3) serve as an introduction for an interested user to explore the topic both on (1) CZ and (2) the web. I had hoped to lay a foundation to present major issues in biology -like (1) evolution as opposed to belief in religion's depiction of creation of man, in a concillatory way that was completely true. 
I wanted the language to be beautiful instead of the conventional routine. But beauty is subjective, after all. I just hope that we can collaborate here and elsewhere better. I never "reverted", by the way. I just went to an older version to retrieve language I thought was good and copied it and pasted it back in so it wouldn't be lost. I have respect for Chris, (especially his work) and the others who made changes and I was trying my best to explain what I was doing. Perhaps we can make a format for editing that is different than the WP wiki - that includes some better way to communicate direction, and that establishes an agreed style so that we don't end up in write-rewrite skirmishes over style?[[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 07:02, 9 November 2006 (CST)
 
== Comparing first paragraphs ==
 
CZ:
 
:Biology is the science of life. Biologists study all aspects of living things, including all of the many life forms on earth and the processes in them that enable life. These basic processes enable living things to harness energy, to synthesise the many different materials that make up their bodies, to assemble these materials to build organs and structures, to correct errors and repair injuries, to sense their environment and to make sense of it, to reproduce themselves, and to communicate with others.
 
:Life forms have been of interest to all peoples throughout history, and the roots of biology go back to earliest known mankind. Curiosity about the human body and about the bodies of plants and animals remains active in every human society. Much of the interest in living things stems from a wish to better exploit natural resources and to improve health, and has yielded detailed knowledge about plants and animals used to improve the standard of living. Not all plant and animal lore is biological science, however. Biology differs from simple interest in plants, animals, and the human body in using a systematic approach to study, that incorporates an understanding of mathematics, physics, chemistry and other sciences. Importantly, not all interest in gaining knowlege about living things comes about from a desire to apply it, whether or not that interest comes from within biology or elsewhere. The core of that desire is sparked by the need to understand the human condition and the nature of the world.
 
WP:
 
:Biology (from Greek βίος λόγος, see below) is the branch of science dealing with the study of living organisms. It is concerned with the characteristics, classification, and behaviors of organisms, how species come into existence, and the interactions they have with each other and with the natural environment. Biology encompasses a broad spectrum of academic fields that are often viewed as independent disciplines. However, together they address phenomena related to living organisms (biological phenomena) over a wide range of scales, from biophysics to ecology. All concepts in biology are subject to the same laws that other branches of science obey, such as the laws of thermodynamics and conservation of mass.
 
:At the organism level, biology has partially explained phenomena such as birth, growth, aging, death and decay of living organisms, similarities between offspring and their parents (heredity) and flowering of plants which have puzzled humanity throughout history. Other phenomena, such as lactation, metamorphosis, egg-hatching, healing, and tropism have been addressed. On a wider scale of time and space, biologists have studied domestication of animals and plants, the wide variety of living organisms (biodiversity), changes in living organisms over many generations (evolution), extinction, speciation, social behaviour among animals, etc.
 
The CZ article shines by comparison.  What's the difference?  The CZ article is really an attempt to ''explain'' the subject, to ''introduce'' it to someone who actually needs an article about the subject.  The WP article, by contrast, reads like a student's report, regurgitating unexplicated facts, often without rhyme or reason.  Consequently, the CZ article (these paragraphs anyway) are actually ''readable'' in a way the WP article isn't.  As many people have observed, WP articles and its system seem to be set up for the benefit of contributors, while we want to be oriented toward users.
 
Think of this now: imagine this sort of authoritative, yet readable treatment being given to ''every'' subject (or, anyway, hundreds of thousands) in Wikipedia.  The result will be, frankly, embarrassing for WP.  There won't be any contest.  I hate to say it, and this is the first time I've said this or even really thought it, but if we do this well, WP might as well give up.
 
--[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 04:14, 9 November 2006 (CST)
 
No question, Nancy has made a great start. Style query - the article avoids the first person - personally I prefer to say "the need to understand ourselves" rather than "the need to understand the human condition" etc ??
I think Larry is right - and although all articles will be collaborative, yet we should wish them to be swans not camels, and so each needs a "voice" of its own, and so needs someone to "set the style" in a coherent way. Delighted for Nancy to do that here. [[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 09:09, 9 November 2006 (CST)
::and just as we follow date or spelling styles already set by the aricle, we sould certainly ry to do additions and changes in as close tothe sle of the article as we can, & I hope Nancy wil upgrade if we fall short.[[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 09:43, 9 November 2006 (CST)
 
==My impression of CZ after 48hrs==
Larry, I think you are missing my point.  I am not saying that Nancy's paragraphs are worse than WP's.  I am saying that they can be copy edited and improved.  Apparently Nancy did not agree since she reverted my edits back to the original version.
 
Nancy, you say that you did not revert "''I never "reverted", by the way. I just went to an older version to retrieve language I thought was good and copied it and pasted it back in so it wouldn't be lost.''". But this is essentially a revert, actually it's worse, since you [http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Biology&diff=100002348&oldid=100002296 lost all the hyperlinks] along the way.
 
Nancy, in multiple places you have stated that you are trying to keep it simple but inspiring:
::"''inspiring and '''simple''' language that might serve as an introduction for an interested user''"  [[Talk:Biology#Nancy.27s_Plan |On this talk page]]
 
::"''I think we need to pull together in format and '''plain language''' style in order to be a better reference, more user -friendly.''" [http://textop.org/smf/index.php?topic=184.0 At Citizendium Forums]
 
I think this is a good goal too. And my copy edits were trying to achieve that goal.  Look at some of the things you changed back without discussion in one of the sentences.
 
My version was:
::'''Biological''' studies of animals fall under the field of [[zoology]], where as the '''biological''' study of plants is called [[botany]]. [[Medicine]] and the [[Health Sciences|'''h'''ealth '''s'''ciences]] apply biology to understand and improve health, and to cure and '''alleviate''' the effects of disease.
 
Your latest version:
::'''Biologic''' studies of animals fall under the field of zoology, where as the '''biologic''' study of plants is called botany. Medicine and the '''H'''ealth '''S'''ciences apply biology to understanding and improving health, and to curing and '''assuaging''' the effects of disease.
 
I have four points here:
:#Can biologic even be used in this context?
:#I don't understand how the use of ''assuage'' could be regarded as more simple than ''alleviate''.
:#All the hyperlinks are gone.
:#You have added capital letters where they are not required (IMO).
 
I'm not going to go into other changes in detail since it is boring, but in other places you added back typos (knowlege) and you ignored my request for a citation to your claim that "''the roots of biology go back to earliest known mankind''". I have not heard this claim before. Is it possible you are referring to the beginning of agriculture, but that is a long time after "earliest known mankind"?
 
Immediately after you "cut and pasted" over my edits you posted the following on the notice board.
::"''Is your User page filled out? Please put ''something'' there if you are active on the pilot wiki. We are not anonymous here, but members of a real community (a welcoming one!).''" [http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Citizendium_Pilot%3ANotice_Board&diff=100002333&oldid=100001852]
 
I am not sure if this was inspired by me, although, as a new editor I had not edited on my user page or talk page. Nancy, a welcoming community would have addressed my newbie questions on this page above [[Talk:Biology#Style]]. It would also be nice if you would have been more thoughtful about my edits before "cutting and pasting". Finally, you could have commented on my talk page and explained to me a bit more about your outline for this page.
 
I would suggest there needs to be more discussion.  If there is a vision for an article it would be helpful if there is an outline. Experts disagree all the time, this is the normal process of editing.  [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 12:05, 9 November 2006 (CST)
 
== notes from new edits after a major revision -[[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 13:12, 10 November 2006 (CST) ==
 
I moved the blurb on the word biology back to the top, BUT NOT BECAUSE I THINK IT IS BEST PLACED THERE. " The word biology" narrative may have its own section later in the article, may be put in a standard place for word roots, may be put any place unobtrusive - but ''cannot'' be included in the introduction of the article without ringing down the curtain for the audience. On the other hand, it's an important section and should be kept - so I stuck it up there before starting the article.
==guinea pigs==
Knowing Nancy a litte, I expect she is willing for this article to be used as an trial example. We will gain more by working this way with a number of the  intial articles than by any amount of theoretical discussion on the list.  WP articles start in various styles, some rather formal, some rather flowery, and many rather drab. I haven't the least preconception of what extent we should keep to a uniform style, or of what it should be (other than not drab. I'd suggest--and I only mean suggest--that normally the beginning of an article should contain an representative very brief introduction to the major themes of the article.
For example, Philosophy of biology is probably appropriate for an article of its own, probably jointly written; it should be represented by a section in the general "biology" article, which in turn should be represented by a sentence or two in the lead paragraph(s). Possibly philosophy of life should be another--and similarly religious views about life are not at all the same thing as religious views about the science of biology.
 
So I tried to change a few phrases myself to make it more exact, trying to use more consistent language, but just to see.
 
The etymologies are goingto be a problem. Perhaps something could be said in a few words, but a full etymology, afrter the fashion of the OED, takes longer. Which raises the question of the source for  the etymologies. We cannot simply copy or slightly abbreviate the OED-- but for many of us, there is no other way to get the information.  Perhaps we need an etymology squad. 
 
Style in working is another problem. Some of us, like myself & Nancy, have only a little experience only with WP;some will have none; some have a great deal. Our attitudes to WP conventions will also vary, and our resulting standard of etiquette wsill have to be worked out.
Some parts of the prior discussion here seem to reflectthe WP dificulty of separating discussions of substance from discussions of method. To adapt a WP phrase, don't bite each other--we're all newcomers here. [[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 22:07, 10 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Appropriate?==
 
The third sentence currently reads (my emphasis in bold):
::These processes include the '''making''' and harnessing of energy, the '''creation''' and duplication of the materials that make up the body.
What is meant by ''making'' and ''creation'' in this sentence? Neither seem suitable in this context.  ''Making'' should probably be removed since as written it seems to contradict the [[first law of thermodynamics]]. Personally, I think synthesis is more accurate than ''creation''.  [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 23:41, 10 November 2006 (CST)
 
synthesize
:#To combine so as to form a new, complex product.
:#To form or produce by chemical synthesis.
 
create
:#To cause to exist; bring into being
:#To give rise to; produce
 
==Location for etymology==
The word biology" narrative may have its own section later in the article, may be put in a standard place for word roots, but ''cannot'' be included in the introduction of the article without ringing down the curtain for the audience. It is important and should appear somewhere agreeable in the first approved version of this article. [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]]
 
==Opening collage==
Collage image needed: fabulous shot of earth from space, juxtaposed to images of plants, animals, and people. These should not be "clinical" but visually compelling. Emotional, dynamic- Lion attacking, baby with lopsided smile, best picture of redwood you ever saw, scanning EM, aomeba streaming, the images chosen out of  highest commercial grade portfolio rather than 5th grade textbook). [[Best if images are clickable- click lion-it roars, click baby, it laughs etc. This could be done with animations using photo's, ties in to streaming video - would have to be readable as stills to those without fast computers or broadband connections)(also wouldn't be a bad idea to have video/audio narrative of text [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]]
==reference for the interest in living things go back to earliest mankind==
I removed the insertion of the "still think we need reference here, etc.,reference for early study etc." that was placed into the text of the article. The placement in the article for this reference to be supplied has succeeded in provoking my answer, but not in what I consider a contructive way - in that it has also succeeded in distraction from finishing a coherent version of the text. Here's my answer: No reference is required, the statement is self-evident. Human beings eat plants and animals. The phrase "the roots of biology" does not mean study, per say, but could mean even interest, note the word "roots" modifying biology. Human beings by their very nature are interested in what sustains their own life, eg, their food.
 
I am trying to write. Please do not obstruct my work. Please keep comments that do not add but instead inhibit the flow of the existing text to discussion tab. I am not that good of a writer that I can argue each point as I try to write. I am going to have to quit for a while here because I am already out of steam. I don't want to be inappropriately personal, but about 10 days ago, I drove my car into an intersection on a green light, was struck by a speeding van that blew through a red light, my car flew into the air and landed on another car. My car and that third vehicle were totalled. I don't know what happened to the van, because I was totally knocked out for some time. I am typing now with one  hand, the other in a very awkward cast, and I was never much of a typist to begin with. I have been asked by another editor to go over this article and try to get it's sound back. Please help me to do that. [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 07:12, 13 November 2006 (CST)
 
:I'm sorry you think my edits are less than constructive. I agree that this should be exciting to read but this should not be at the expense of accuracy.  While I agree I am nitpicking on word usage, my aim is that they are edits to improve the accuracy of the article.
:Please excuse the insertion with the request for a reference, after watching you edit this article I had assumed such insertions were your ''modus operandi''. I certainly prefer to discuss things on the talk page too and agree that editorial comments in the article inhibit the flow of the existing text. That is why i pasted your two editorial comments above from the article to here. So lets start again. [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 10:47, 13 November 2006 (CST)
::One way to avoid being interrupted is to work off-line. This can be problematic in active topics in WP, with multiple daily confusing edits, but should be more feasible here.[[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 00:00, 14 November 2006 (CST)
 
----
 
In the introduction there is a sentence that reads as follows.
::"''Living organisms have been of interest to all peoples throughout history, and, accordingly, the roots of biology go back to earliest mankind.''"
Is there a citation for the claim that "the roots of biology go back to earliest known mankind"? I have not heard this claim before. Is it referring to the beginning of agriculture, but that is a long time after "earliest known mankind"? It is not clear to me how far back this implies. What is the evidence they were studying their environment as opposed to ''being at one'' with their environment? [[User:Chris day]]
:No reference is required, the statement is self-evident. Human beings eat plants and animals. The phrase "the roots of biology" does not mean study, per say, but could mean even interest, note the word "roots" modifying biology. Human beings by their very nature are interested in what sustains their own life, eg, their food. [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD]]
::When I first read the current sentence I had tyhought there was an implication of an event that sparked the biological interest in humans only. But now I read your explanation it would appear that the roots of biology is fuzzy and go back much further than mankind. May be we could modify it to prehistory as suggested by [http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Biology&diff=100002782&oldid=100002779 David Goodman]? [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 10:47, 13 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Suggestion==
1)  I strongly suggest that we move on. The introductory paragraphs are great for now, but the rest of the article needs to take shape. Then we will certainly need to revisit with a final check and copy edit, but it seems to me that we are leaving the big issues aside, and when the whole shape of the article is clearer we may think differently.
The first paragraphs have established a voice and a level that now needs to be extended. The third section on History needs to trace some selected path of the many possible, but I like the idea of picking on one stream of technological change - microscopy - to show how increasing sophistication in our ability to measure things has changed our understanding in fundamental ways.
 
2)  Keeping then to the theme that Biology is inspired by a wish to understand what life is, what are the milestones that we should choose here?
Amongst these might be:
:*Viruses and bacteria at the e m level?
:*Images of chromosomes? - Fragile X syndrome?
:*X-ray diffraction alongside a double helix?
:*Imaging of calcium changes in an egg at fertilisation? Video anyone?
 
3) Then what? ''..a grandeur in this view of life..? ''
 
3)  Then - Classification I think should just go into another article.
 
4)  I don't like the idea of lists within this article - we could just shift the lists to a subarticle and link to them. For now they're a diversion and I can just see them becoming an unwieldy, arbitrary selection that is a source of unproductive controversy.
 
Let's remember, this article is a gateway, so the snippets we mention here must have somewhere good to go. This article is just the start.[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 03:58, 14 November 2006 (CST)
 
:I rescued the classification stuff from the original article since I cannot imagine an article on biology that does not discuss the kingdoms of life. The current section is practically unchanged from the wiki version but i left it all since it gives some insight to the other content here. Likewise the list was just global links that I harvested from the deleted version.  Some of these can be incorporated into the article. For now they are just there for context with respect to other content in CZ.
 
:Just out of interest, are we going with templates or similar?  The ones such as the [[:Template:Biology-footer|Biology footer]] certainly gives a lot of contextual links in the minimum space. Much of this depends on how the article are to be classified in lieu of categories. The other viable option, [[Talk:Biology#Style|as I discussed above]], is to reference to a separately maintained list, for example ''[[List of biology disciplines]]''. I agree the lists in this overview article are the least desirable option.
 
:As far as milestones, classification wrt to [[Carolus_Linnaeus|Linnaeus]] is the foundation for much of modern biology and the diversity of life is still one of the major themes in undergraduate education. Obviously Mendel and Darwin's contributions should be regarded as milestones. With respect to the modern era, many of the milestones have been from a technological perspective.  Starting with sequencing proteins and DNA to whole genomes. More recently the huge impact of GFP from an imaging perspective and PCR from a recombinant DNA perspective.
 
:I agree all these milestone are important but at some point the relationships between the different fields of biology should be discussed, especially how the lines of demarcation are becoming blurred. I'm not sure the priority for this article should be to document the history of biology but rather explain the discipline, preferably with as much reference to modern biology as to the nostalgic milestones. A nod to the current trend of ''BIG'' biology is probably appropriate too. [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 13:44, 14 November 2006 (CST)
 
Classification is important of course, but this article is just the popular front page of what should become a series of deeper and deeper focussed articles. Here I'd like to see just enough hint of the interest in the kingdoms of life to attract a reader to an article on just that - maybe a snippet about extremophiles?. Similarly with the other "tasters" - and yes, a couple of things at the very forefront would be great.
 
My own preference is for an article that could be printed off and look good; so I prefer as little clutter as possible. I like the idea of a separate article that is maybe an annotated list, or a map of biology. I wonder if we can't do something imaginative for this on CZ - even just being able to collapse and open sections of a map to see subfields. Footers, I guess the policies on these are up for discussion.
:Any number of graphic indexes can be added after we have the articles. They are not mutually exclusive. The only real difficult is the need to keep them up to date and consistent with each other. [[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 22:39, 14 November 2006 (CST)
::This is not really an issue if templates are used (the [[:Template:Biology-footer|biology footer]] is such a template).  One change to the original template will be reproduced on all pages that include (transclude) the template. This makes maintenance quite easy. [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 22:55, 14 November 2006 (CST)
::I wasn't referring to style or wording, but rather to the addition of new topics, which must be assigned a place in each classification scheme where placement is not automatic. WP has not done very well on that score.[[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 19:42, 15 November 2006 (CST)
:::Now i get you, I think.  In WP, the main problem seems to be that people don't know how to use categories, or should I say, there is no consistent use of categories. Not sure how this will end up here.  Specifically, what do you have in mind with respect to problems in keeping them consistent with each other? Is this with respect of how they are labelled or placed in the hierachy? [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 02:25, 16 November 2006 (CST)
Who are we aiming at exactly? I guess I have in mind an article that would interest the school student who's just deciding whether to follow a path in Biology to University, and which would be looked on with some pride by anyone who calls themselves a biologist as a suitable advert for their calling.[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 16:33, 14 November 2006 (CST)
 
== Need Help with Images, Please ==
 
Would like to develop "Development of Biology" with elaboration of theme of fertilization yielding zygote. I have a complex plan for text, would like to incorporate technology theme using microscope. Require several images, that I think I have found. (1)  Take look at this link:http://academic.evergreen.edu/v/vivianoc/homunculus.gif
That's one I think would be great. Can somebody make sure it's ok to use and upload it?
 
Next, plain light microscopy human sperm. Here's an example, although I think it's probably copyrighted. http://www.hometrainingtools.com/tbimages/1142.800.600.jpg
I think it's important to get a light microscopy picture that is no more than 500 mag, as van L. would not have had higher mag.
 
Then, SEM image, and maybe others.
 
[[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 20:57, 17 November 2006 (CST)
 
 
::About the image [http://academic.evergreen.edu/v/vivianoc/homunculus.gif homunculus.gif], in this site is written: "''All content and images on this site are copyrighted by The Evergreen State College.''" [[User:Rilson Versuri|R.Versuri]] 05:27, 18 November 2006 (CST)
 
Hi Nancy,
 
I would be more then happy to try to help you out. I just looked at the first image and it looks like it’s a custom photo from this teacher:
 
http://academic.evergreen.edu/v/vivianoc/
 
I highly doubt that it is copyrighted. At the bottom of the page it said the website was last updated in 2000 so that is another reason why I don't think they would care. However, I sent an email and asked for formal permission anyways.
 
As for the other picture they say that you may use their pictures just as long as you are teaching science and give proper attribution in their terms of use here:
 
http://www.hometrainingtools.com/faq/our-company/q69.html
 
I don’t know if this applies for an online encyclopedia however. It looks like a promotional shot for one of their microscopes which would probably make it copyrighted. I do think they would let us use it so I asked for formal permission and I will let you know about the response.
 
Feel free to just brown the net and don’t be scared to find high quality photos that you want and I will review the copyrights for you. Just let me know if you need anything.
 
[[User:Eric Pokorny|Eric Pokorny]] 00:31, 20 November 2006 (CST)
 
Hi Nancy, have you seen the animation in the WP article on DNA? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/DNA  I'm envious, should we use it here?[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 10:17, 22 November 2006 (CST)
 
== Biology editors-take a look at article discussion please ==
[[Image:ADN animation.gif|right]]
Yes, Gareth - it looks great, but I'm not able to stick it in the article- can you? Also, I've been slowly trying to fill out the "development" section by using points provided by what others had listed in the "major themes in biology". It's still raw, and much may not yet make clear sense, but I'm hoping I can turn it over to you all in a fairly short time. Do you, or anyone interested, have additional suggestions? Chris? David?  Could you tell me your ideas here in discussion? It's hard to maintain a "voice" in the narrative tone of the article with multiple authors editing the text, but certainly you are welcome to make contributions there as well. If you read it at least initially without modification, I hope that you'll see that many past suggestions have been incorporated. It takes me a long time, with many revisions, to get it down - but new suggestions would also get incorporated if chosen to be made here in discussion.
 
Looking forward to hearing from you[[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 11:19, 23 November 2006 (CST)
===comments--DG===
Nancy, you've asked me for general comments. The summary and first paragraphs are in your personal style, and I am not sure how many others will do similar.  I do not consider this a problem or disadvantage, because in my personal view there should not be one uniform style; I do not know how others will feel. But I'd certainly defend doing it this way for any similar general article--even though I intend to do nothing of the sort myself.
 
For the rest, what needs to be done is to outline the different fields, and the different dimensions in which they vary; plant/animal/micro-organism, historical/biographical. etc , and I think this is what you are trying to do. It may be better to do some of this after the next level articles are written, because
what you are saying about the early history of biology, for example) must match to some extent what the writer of that article will want to do.
 
Most of the rest you've written is history of biology. (I think after that, all the different subjects must be at least mentioned and interconnected, and I am not sure you are planning to do so.) I think you give too much detail is some parts, and that you will not be able to sustain the entire article at this depth.  I am not sure that all of it is balanced. Aristotle's views on embryonic development are interesting, not least because he got it wrong, and all of this should be explained in a separate article.
To try to accurately summarize historical developments in a sentence is tricky, as I 've found in other subjects, and takes much experimentation at various hands until it comes out correct and understandable--this is one of the areas where the multiple reader of WP sometimes help --and of course sometimes turn into mush.  It is in particular very tricky indeed to summarize the meaning of classification and similar subjects. It is even tricky when philosophical roots or historical influences are treated. Writing  like "Science is always influenced by past ideas. No scientist can consider any idea, or analyze experimental results without using his or her mind. That mind is both consciously and unconsciously stamped with the culture that produced it." need to be well integrated, not mentioned as asides.
 
I am not saying that I or any of us could individually have done better. Please don't misunderstand that. This article is merely being used as a convenient example, for it is the first of the science articles to be written from the beginning. [[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 22:52, 24 November 2006 (CST)
 
I think this is a great draft, a strong vision for an article that will be distinctive and interesting. Yes I agree fully that handling historical truth and scientific truth too can be very tricky, to simplify without loss of integrity, and this is where our combined expertise will be needed. I think some decisions need to be made to cut some things and develop others - there are a few hanging details that should either be developed or lost I think. There's still a bit of a logical gap in places and I'm wondering if Dreich's work might bridge a gap between the egg and DNA - his experiments (the motivation for vitalism for him) showed that early division of an embryo produces two perfect clones - so the information needed to build the whole is present in the component parts, and of course the explanation for what this vital spark was came with understanding of DNA?[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 15:11, 28 November 2006 (CST)
 
== New author from WP POV ==
 
Hey ya'll, I just had the opportunity to read your article.  If all of CZ comes close to this, we will have something really valuable.  I like the tone, narrative form and integration of history that allows the reader to be introduced to the biological sciences in a logical order that flows with the advancements in thought and technology.  It also hints at the reductionist mindset that searched deeper and deeper into the origins of life with the microscope, EM, DNA, etc., while still being able to expose the lateral tangents of specialities such as marine biology, and emergent qualities of complex interconnectedness of ecological communities.  All held together with a common theme of "where did we come from" that won't let the reader stop until they get to the end.  Almost makes me want to be a biologist;)  Good work! --[[User:D. Matt Innis|D. Matt Innis]] 20:58, 29 November 2006 (CST)
 
==Some comments on the first section==
From a whole article perspective I wonder if the section titles are a bit too long. It might be better to be more concise and have a sub title to expand on the idea of each section. Specifically I read throught the 'scope of biology' section.  i made a few copy edits but have saved major comments for here.
 
::''Whether scientific thinking about these issues is compatible with religious beliefs is ''itself'' contentious. 
 
I find this sentence to be hanging.  By saying "is itself contentious" seems to imply that the previous questions posed (When did life begin? What is life?), are also contentious. Is this the intent? Why not something along the lines of: "But whether scientific thinking about these issues is compatible with religious beliefs is contentious."
 
::''Some religious leaders have deplored the scientist's mechanistic view of nature that removes the requirement for active intervention by the divine.
 
Is this true? I don't think scientists remove the requirement for active intervention by the divine. The problem is that it can't be tested and therefore is not encompassed by science.
 
::''In this view, mathematical equations and the language of prophets are simply two different forms of human expression, each attempting to describe a higher dimension than ordinary humans experience.
 
It seems that others here like this type of big picture view, but i have to ask is this really topical for this article? I like the Crick reference but this is getting to be too far from biology.  It seems to be more appropriate in the article on [[science]].
 
::''Although science addresses fundamental issues about life, biology is also used to answer practical questions, which are posed to advance medical and dental care, agriculture and animal husbandry.
 
Again this sentence seems to be skipping between the umbrella of science and biology. Why "science addresses" rather than "biologists address"?
 
::''It is through applied biology that the [[health sciences]] became such effective [[healing arts]] and that the world's food supply has become both safer and more plentiful.
 
Here I don't understand the reference to healing arts.  It seems to imply that medicine is a healing art, yet healing art does not appear to include modern medicine. Shouldn't this be more along the lines of "It is through applied biology that the [[health sciences]] transformed the [[healing arts]] into modern medicine" or something similar? Another related issue here is that the healing arts article should be titled '''Healing arts''' not '''Healing Arts''' otherwise healing arts will have to be piplinked every time it is mentioned in an article.
 
::#''(see [[Albert Einstein]] for detailed discussion with references).
::#''Many of the academic disciplines that make up biology are listed at the bottom of this article along with a brief description.
;;#''Further information about each is provided through links to other articles within Citizendium that can be accessed by clicking each discipline's name.
 
I have general question with regard to the three editorial comments that appear in the article.  Can't we assume they know to click on links for more information? These types of comments seem unnecessary for articles.  [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 02:24, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
All good points, and I've tried to addresss them as I agree with them.
Couple of minor things,
 
I'm quite anxious to avoid mixed metaphors, (sorry it's a wee bugbear of mine). Things like "roots" of biology, and can you spark a core? I'll do an edit for those sometime, don't mean to dull the language.
 
On where it goes - I think we need to mention the Human Genome project, the shock at the low number of genes, and then in the last para might go into systems biology as a post genomic way forward?[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 09:03, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
Medicine is a healing art. Biology is a science. Root has a well-recognized meaning that is not associated with plants, see Oxford Eng Dict. II. 6.  a. The source or origin of some quality, condition, tendency, etc. I would argue that if a desire can be sparked, then the core of desire is ''also'' inflammable. Please smile, guys. Come on, there is a fine line between correction and nit-picking, language can only be changed to a point 'by commitee' without changing an essay into a list of words. [[User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 09:37, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
:Nancy, please read our comments with a more jovial tone, you did ask for comments above. I think you are missing my smile and my effort to work with you on this article, I was the one that added the ''sparked'' mixed metaphor. Nevertheless, some of my comments above I do consider to be important issues, one I'll remention since no one has commented on this yet. The article writes: "''scientist's mechanistic view of nature that removes the requirement for active intervention by the divine''", but in what way does science remove the the requirement for active intervention?  As far as I am aware the most we can say here is that the scientific method can not test for active invention by the divine. This might be viewed as nitpicking but the way it is currently written sounds like it's anti-religion.  As we all know, science is not anti-religion, it just has nothing to say about religion.
 
:I am not trying to force anything into or out of the article which is why I put the comments here on the talk page rather than making the edits myself. All my comments here are for you to take or leave. Above many good things have been said about this article, but what you really need to hear are your peers pointing out the weaker parts. This does not mean we are saying this article is bad. I, for one, am trying to be contructive and help you see areas that could be improved. [[User:Chris day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris day|(Talk)]] 11:12, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
== Nancy Challenges You To Create An Approval Process ==
 
Nobody says this has to be the last article written on the subject, but it seems to me that it is complete and accurate enough to have a protected version generated and the approval process - which as you know is not at all worked out- to be started. This would be the very first article to start that process and the input for how it should proceed deserves the attention of you all. As we have already shown here, if we dwell on each editors preference for each word looking for unanimous consensus we are likely to simply continually unwrite and rewrite without notable progress.Yeah, the Human Genome Project is interesting and important, but it is a fool's task to encompass all that is interesting and important into a little essay on a major subject. Does the essay introduce the subject? Does it serve the goals outlined in the plan? There are illustrations to find and additional readings to pick. This article, once approved, is not cut in stone but refreshed on the web. Nobody says that it even has to be the ONLY article on biology, maybe it could be Biology (General) and there could be another version that is Biology (Professional Level). We have talked about having different levels. Nobody says that even if approved it could not be out on a wiki to be continually edited, and whatever it morphs into might eventually replace it as the approved article. 
 
Perhaps we can have a category of approved articles that are off the wiki, meaning putting them in that category protects them, but there would also be an ongoing draft article of the same name. Like Category: Protected Current Approved Version for Biology (general) and Biology (general) in Category: Open Version Draft in Progress. I think it's important to distinguish between the two for reasons of liability, as well as keeping track of what we have approved and what's changing. Still, that leaves the approval process itself un-addressed.
 
Who has pragmatic ideas for an approval process? Nancy Sculerati MD 09:37, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
This is an important article for CZ because it will be the first or one of the first to be approved - and obviously it's gtting there. I think it's important therefore that it really is exceptional - i.e. what would be Feature article standard for WP and better. We need images, and we need to feel happy not just that this article can be approved, but that this is one of our showcase products. We all want this to be great, and we all want to see it as something we feel as proud to have been part of as possible. We can take images from WP for now, but it would be nice to find new ones - unfortunately that's something I've not worked out how to do well myself. Matt I know is good at this though.. :) [[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 12:29, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
::Yes, Gareth, I did some on WP.  I was looking earlier when Nancy was asking about it and noticed that the copyright process is different here on CZ.  It does not seem to be as stringent.  I am concerned that it will get us into trouble if we publish something that is not public domain, so I will look for those first.  Give me some ideas of what you want.  I noticed the animated DNA on the talk page, do you want it in the article? --[[User:D. Matt Innis|D. Matt Innis]] 14:31, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 
Approval process here is complicated in that we shouldn't approve this ourselves as authors but need another party - and I guess for major showcase articles we need care. [[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 12:33, 30 November 2006 (CST)
:Conceptually, the writer(s) need to think they're ready, it  has to be copyedited (I don't think any of the copy-editors have yet been appointed, but a number of editors said they'd be willing to do this also) , and there needs to be an editor or editors, however volunteered/selected/drafted --and whether selected at the beginning or the end of the writing.
:I think that this is at least 3 different people--no one can copy-edit their own writing all that well, and though in the RW editors often do it themselves, I think that given the method of composition, another check is required.
:I think of the work you--and we-- have been doing here is collaborative writing, not editing in the CZ sense. (it would be "editing" in WPm but that's what we're trying to  get away from.)
:And the appinted editor was also I think going to have the editing discussed in the workgroup at least.
:There's a discussion on this in the "approval standards" part of the "Editors" forum, and I think we probably should move the discussion there, as it's of general interest. [[User:DavidGoodman|DavidGoodman]] 12:44, 30 November 2006 (CST)
 


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See [http://forum.citizendium.org/index.php/topic,331.msg2730.html#msg2730 this forum page.]  We have no shortage of problems--use your creativity to think of solutions. --[[User:Larry Sanger|Larry Sanger]] 19:18, 13 December 2006 (CST)
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Housekeeping edits with respect to approvals

  • About this page

The first section of this archive represents various discussions specific to the approval process from version 1 to 1.2.1. Section two represents article specific discussion.

  • Current approved version

Version 1.2.1 Records of approval are kept in draft talk page with details commented out. Editor=David Tribe Source of text is the draft entry with url=http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Biology/Draft&oldid=100024537 January 30, 2007 Approval of Version 1.2.1.--actioned by Ruth Ifcher 00:53, 4 February 2007 (CST) This changes formalizes two minor edits (full stops and blank spaces plus emergency changes to several figures caused by changes in primary file sizes of figures that lack thumbnails. Annotation of this action documented here by David Tribe 02:54, 4 February 2007 (CST)

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Edits to templates and figure primary files may affect approved page appearance David Tribe 21:51, 26 January 2007 (CST)
  • Biology Version 1. Article Plan, Policies, and Decisions
  • Here we need to summarize the conclusions arrived at in the archived discussions, in a bulleted list.
  • This set of policies should go at the top of the talk page.

Folks, can you fill in the above? I.e., in bulleted points, what should we glean from the discussions so far? What have the editors decided? Still waiting for this. Can you make any generalizations? You don't need to report everything that was decided, because that would take nearly as long as the talk archives themselves. But what about the structure of the article? The style? Things that writers need to know that might not be obvious simply by reading the article? Please try your hand at this. --Larry Sanger 17:13, 25 January 2007 (CST)


Edits leading to the first approval

Proposed Article Plan

a) purpose: a true and accurate explanation of the subject that is an inspiring introduction for an interested user to explore the topic both on (1) CZ and (2) the web. To introduce a few selected major issues in biology -like (1) evolution as opposed to belief in religion's depiction of creation of man.

b) style/intended readership level. Simple but elegant language. As a flagship entry point into Biology, this article should be written at a consciously lay level. Keep jargon out and use natural language wherever possible. Maintain a consistency and coherence of style within this article.

b) length. Short and sweet; An essay that is readable and enjoyable alone, and which looks good when printed out.

c) things needed urgently: suggestions for illustrations, or for particular examples, interesting in their own right, understandable to lay readers, illustrative of the excitement about biology, from different perspectives (impact of biological science on our lives and the environment - the Green revolution? cloning? molecular biology and understanding the building blocks of life? Ecosystems, evolution, genetic engineering, brain imaging?

This article cannot and should not attempt to be comprehensive. It doesn't matter what is left out, only that what is included is interesting and inspiring to a lay audience, accurate for an expert reader, beautiful in words, images and layout to both, and that paths to follow are signposted. How this is to be done is not clear, I personally do not like lists; I'd rather see a link to a list here, and would still rather see a link to a "map". As this article should contain nothing seriously disputed, the need for references is minimal. Gareth Leng 06:06, 10 November 2006 (CST)

Talk

Dr. Sculerati--that's quite bold, to simply dive in and rewrite the thing from scratch. I like it!

However, there is one problem, that anyone (not just you) could help with. It is that there are many links from the original biology article that no longer exist. That doesn't necessarily mean that the pages linked-to are orphans, but what it does mean is that there is no longer such an easy way into those topics from the article. What I suggest, then, if we completely scrap an old article, is that we keep a list of old links at the bottom of the article, and make sure they are incorporated into the article as appropriate. (Of course, some links probably don't need to appear anywhere on the page at all. But the names of subdisciplines, yes.) --Larry Sanger 02:40, 1 November 2006 (CST)

Fields list

I'd like to comment, but I do not know how far developed you consider this to be. Your list of fields is partial, but is it more helpful to contribute more now or to wait until you have done s--in what will undoubtedly be a more systematic way?20:47, 2 November 2006 (CST)

Reply to above by Nancy

I think I finished the basic summary, though it sure needs polishing. I would like to see it remain short. I am currently working on History and Development of Biology section. This is likely to go on for a while, and likely to stay in Biology only in outline form with a touch of narrative and then get broken off and moved to its own article. My plan is to merge it what currently exists under that title, if I can. As I get to major figures in Biology, I have been reviewing and making CZ Live their biography articles. If you look at Anton Van Luuenhook, you'll see that I came up with a header Biography section that contains the names discussion, and a second header with place of birth, date of birth - death. I'd love for the text in those headers to be in a slightly but significantly smaller font. Back to Biology, I would so appreciate it if somebody would address Larry's concerns above. Would you be so kind as to add to Distinct Academic Disciplines within Biology (Partial List)? Unless you object, I'd appreciate keeping to the curent style- very brief and general description of each in plain language, including an internal link. P.S. who are you? regards, Nancy Sculerati MD 11:21, 3 November 2006 (CST)

It my have been me. But I agree that it is too early to decide on

what will be the useful links. Another qy about the links is whether they go only 1 link down, e.g. just to Zoology, or to Mammals. For a topic like this, it might be useful to have a page showing the hierarchy of articles, though you'd need several since they intersect--maybe we have someone is is good with 3D graphics? I'm going to try to do groups from different aspects in Zoology so I can see what works, but I'm going to put it in words first, before I do a single list. Probably will take till the 15th, because I'll be away most of the time till then.

A related question is whether there should be somewhere to put the "meet" of the topic--do we do little articles all the way down, or do we stop at e.g., Mammals, and do something more comprehensive. Perhaps we've more or less come to the conclusion that the top level is not the place, if only because the article would be too long.DavidGoodman 22:13, 5 November 2006 (CST)

Style

I have made quite a few edits and have a few points to address regarding those edits. First, what is citizendium planning on doing with respect to style issues? I noticed this page has already started drifting away from those established in wikipedia. Was that intentional? I have made some changes to the titles that conform to the MoS in wikipedia. I have also established a reference section at the bottom so citations can be added.

I add some content back, such as the classification section. I hope that is OK. Along those lines, I have also restored many of internal links that were lost during the initial reorganization. Maybe we do not want to discuss homeostasis or even link to it but we can see how the article develops with time.

With respect to the lists I am not sure which is the best way to go. For the topics have add all three possible routes in the one section, we need to decide the best way to present such information. Three possible choices include: 1) having a footer template and nothing in the article; 2) Having a comprehensive list in the article; or 3) having a narrative on the topics with a reference to a separately maintained list on a different page. Chris day 05:02, 7 November 2006 (CST)

Biology and philosophy

I moved the following paragraph from the introduction:

Biology asks some of same questions found in religion and philosophy, questions such as "How did life begin?", and "What features seperate something that is alive from something that is not alive?". The biologist approaches these questions using the scientific method. Therefore, the biologists answers to such questions differ from the answers found in philosophical and religious works. Whether scientific thinking about such great issues as the origin of life on earth is compatable with religious doctrine is itself a contentious issue. Some great thinkers, such as the physicist Albert Einstein, have found no real conflict on the varying teachings in science and religion, but consider Divinity and the Natural Universe to be one and the same (see Albert Einstein for detailed discussion with references).

This seems to be a little off track for the introduction but as the whole article is not currently layed out I cannot tell how it will relate to future content. To me it seems like material that should be in the body of the article itself. Also, biologists barely touch on the subject of "how did life begin", so it seems a little too much weight for an overview article (assuming you are planning to flesh this out in the main text). Chris day 13:38, 7 November 2006 (CST)

Chris, I find the paragraph on the philosophy of the biological approach, elegantly written. After all, what separates biology from intelligent design or religion? I am new to CZ so please forgive any lapses in protocol. What inspired Watson & Crick was an attempt to understand what constitutes life. So this is engaging, and inspiring to the reader. So just as where did the universe evolve from inspires the physicist, the understanding of what constitutes life is the ultimate question in Biology. As Feynman stated, I wonder why, I wonder why I wonder.

Biology asks some of same questions found in religion and philosophy, questions such as "How did life begin?", and "What features seperate something that is alive from something that is not alive?". The biologist approaches these questions using the scientific method. Therefore, the biologists answers to such questions differ from the answers found in philosophical and religious works. Whether scientific thinking about such great issues as the origin of life on earth is compatable with religious doctrine is itself a contentious issue. Some great thinkers, such as the physicist Albert Einstein, have found no real conflict on the varying teachings in science and religion, but consider Divinity and the Natural Universe to be one and the same (see Albert Einstein for detailed discussion with references). Arnold R. Rabin,MSEE,M.D. --Arnold Rabin 04:23, 8 November 2006 (CST)

My problem is that it romanticises biology into something it is not. Very few biologists ask "How did life begin?" or "What is life?" What they routinely ask is how does it work. Or with respect to watson and Crick what is the structure. I know this sounds boring but it is the reality of the work. Chris day 08:28, 8 November 2006 (CST)

Many do not subscribe to the idea that biology is boring. An analogy might be that computer science is boring because most programmers write code or algorithms to solve discrete problems. Much of it is mundane. However in the hierarchy of CS is Kurzweil, von Neumann. So when I look up computer science, it can read a) the study of the hardware and software used to solve problems that would take enormous amounts of time if done manually. b) the study and application of circuits and algorithms to engage in problem solving; the ultimate goal of which is to achieve a level of problem solving than is not possible by man alone. I understand your difficulty with "What is life?" in a practical sense. We certainly ask "What is life?", when looking at phage, DNA , RNA viruses and now Preons, we rethink what is life.

Chris, I agree that this is a matter of style. Can we be engaging without seeming to be unrealistic or trite. In fact, in my opinion, it is engaging writing that can set CZ apart. "I looked up --- the other day and was blown away by the elegance and incite of its editors. Since Larry's goal is to set CZ apart because of our expertise, these discussions are powerful. With editors with great expertise, this can be the most accurate and the most engaging and welcome source. Maybe we can get Larry Sanger's input on style as well as that of science editors. After all it is iteration that will make CZ a great reference. In addition, the author cites Einstein inaccurately. What Einstein implied was that the mystery of life or creation of the universe was not incompatible with belief in a higher entity, he did not subscribe to religious dogma. As an aside, Einstein also stated "God does not throw dice" when confronted with quantum theory. He was wrong.--Arnold Rabin 14:58, 8 November 2006 (CST)

I am definitely not implying that biology is boring. How a cell functions and reproduces itself is fascinating and mind boggingly (is that a word?) elegant. On the other hand we need to keep the intro based in reality. When biologist ask a question such as "What is life?" is it really any different to the philosphers? We are in awe at the biology but I don't think we are using the scientific method to specifically address that question. And if we are going to cite a physicist, I would have thought Erwin Schrodinger would be more appropriate. I will add, i am not trying to black ball this paragraph but I think it needs to be discussed and through collaboration it can be improved. Chris day 15:30, 8 November 2006 (CST)
I think articles should have a personality and be interestingly written. It's possible to have a neutral article that is written in a lively way. --Larry Sanger 15:43, 8 November 2006 (CST)
I agree with this sentiment, I just thought the way it was written was a little too much (just my opinion of course). While you here, is there a manual of style? I am noticing editors here changing the stardard style of wikipedia. An example would be capitalising all words in section titles. I have nothing against that style, however, since all these articles have been scrapped from wikipedia changing that style will entail changing every article to be consistent. Have you decided how to address this issue yet? Chris day 15:58, 8 November 2006 (CST)
After poking around a bit i found the following in the forums http://textop.org/smf/index.php?board=24.0
So from what i can gather there is no set style manual in place. Is that correct? Chris day 16:20, 8 November 2006 (CST)

Intro Changes

I am by no means a biology expert, but from a layout perspective, I feel like the etymology doesn't belong at the top of the page. I tossed it atop the history section, because it seems like it should be there. I feel like the intro should be something simpler, something completely straightforward and clear to everybody, and the "Biology is the science of life" paragraph does that perfectly. I also added the third sentence to fill it out a bit, and because I think it is worth noting that Biology is a major field of science. --ZachPruckowski 15:23, 8 November 2006 (CST)

Reply to Chris on Style and to comment on Einstein made by another

Chris, I wrote the "romantic" text which is absolutely accurate, scientifically. We are not in the business of making prose sound conventional, it's truth we are after, and the clearer and more interesting the prose the better. Einstein is not inaccurately quoted. Yes, his remark about the statitical nature of quantum mechanics being unappealing in light of his idea of God is often referred to, but there is more. Click the link to the Einstein article. He clearly stated that he believed in "Spinoza's God", of the mechanism of the Universe. In other words, that the laws of the universe ARE God. Thoughtful religious people understand that the nature of God is not clear to man, and can find a resolution between science and religion, sometimes, through this viewpoint. Nancy Sculerati MD 19:09, 8 November 2006 (CST)

The reason I changed the prose was because I found the original hard to understand. So i would debate whether they are clear and more interesting. I am not trying to be negative but bring a new perspective. This is meant to be a collaborative effort afterall. The romanticised part I pasted to the talk page. Why wouldn't Schrödinger's "What is Life?" treatise be more appropriate for the intro with respect to big picture thinking? Einstein seems to be several steps away from biology with respect to his comments. Chris day 19:33, 8 November 2006 (CST)
On a pragamatic level, adding to the article by extending the unfinished segments would further the enterprise. Nancy Sculerati MD 20:48, 8 November 2006 (CST)
That is true but there is no reason we cannot discuss the current content too. Chris day 20:51, 8 November 2006 (CST)

As we are trying to educate a world audience, touching on such issues as the potential conflict between science and religion seems worthwhile. I believe that the question of "what is life?" lies at the very heart of biology, and that portraying the work of the "average biologist" is not the point. In fact, that reduction of everything to the most average is one of the biggest problems with WP- errors are reduced by constant editing but so is excellence. Now, back to Einstein. I believe that many religious people distrust biology because of fears about going against their faith. Einstein actually addressed this issue. Others may have addressed it better - but Einstein rings a big bell in minds across the planet and that's part of the considered reason for this choice. It's good to discuss, I am glad to be part of the work. You see, I see it in romantic terms - putting together a compendium of knowlege! To do such a thing we must be bold, but when there is so much to do, we best work together and advance the mission. We, and generations to come, will have infinite time to refine each paragraph. I hope, anyway! regards,Nancy Sculerati MD 21:01, 8 November 2006 (CST)

Nancy, I agree with should work together but this series of edits you made is not furthering the progress of this page. You have reverted back to your original version and in the process lost many stylistic changes that are important. Wikilinks are gone for one. I think these are early days here and there is little traffic but you should be willing to discuss differences on the talk page. Just reverting things back to your old version is not very inviting from a collaborative perspective. Personally, I am not particularly bothered to fight this one out but as more people get involved you will find that other editors will change your edits too. This is encouraged and usually after a few back and forth edits the articles are better not worse.
With respect to portraying an average biologists perspective that is hardly the issue here. The changes i made were minor with respect to the wording. Admitedly I cut the religion paragraph but that is because I think it is not suitable for the introduction. What is the intention of this article? To give an overview of biology or to debate the philosophy of biology?
It may be true that Einstein rings a bell across the planet, but what does that have to do with biology? Don't you think it will confuse people more than get them excited?Chris day 21:14, 8 November 2006 (CST)

Article planning

I don't pretend to have a view on what's being discussed above, but I would like to say that an essential function of CZ is for editors to come to agree upon a set of guidelines for particular articles. This article is illustrates the need to focus on that function, because the article will be examined and changed (probably) by many authors and editors. Some clearly-stated principles are, therefore, desperately needed, or else the article will be endlessly changed endlessly by people with very different ideas about the function of this sort of article. It seems to me the efficient way to agree on a set of guidelines is to separate out various contentious questions, discuss them individually, and agree to reach an agreement, i.e., discuss with a view to developing a consensus. We ought to make use of a "dispute resolution" process only as a last resort, I think. By the way, I think every article should have a threaded forum attached. What we might do, in lieu of that, is set up the CZ Forums with a bunch of discipline-specific boards, and then let people link from talk pages to those boards.

Over the coming weeks and months, I propose that we draft some succinctly-worded policies that describe our best practices. The jumping-off place for finding those policies will be CZ:Project Home. --Larry Sanger 00:36, 9 November 2006 (CST)

Comment on Approach

Congratulations to Nancy on diving in and starting afresh; I think a start like this is exactly what is needed to focus the issues. I think it will be easier for others to chip in if we can see where the article is going. I'd suggest maybe that Nancy proposes on this page an article plan, stating the purpose as she sees it, but including perhaps the following -

a) purpose: to act as a gateway into other articles? To advertise high points from other CZ articles with selected links and images?

b) style/intended readership level. As a flagship entry point into Biology I think it's appropriate to keep this article at a consciously lay level. Keep jargon out and use natural language wherever possible?

b) length. Short and sweet? An essay that is readable and enjoyable alone?That looks good when printed out? It might therefore be that the links and references should be kept sparse.

c) things needed urgently suggestions for illustrations, or for examples?

Maybe the only links should be to the next hierarchy of articles, or maybe the hierarchy should be displayed here as a box with links, and excluded otherwise?. WP loves links, but they clutter an article, and maybe this should be kept as clean as possible. I especially feel that this particular article should not include external links - this is a gateway to CZ biology, not the world. Leave the external links to the subarticles.

I think this draft goes too fast from the lay to the technical, and that Classification should definitely go elsewhere. I like the idea of selecting a few examples (maybe some historical, some contemporary technological perhaps -transgenics?- some molecular (DNA structure), and yes in particular examples there might be technical terms, but so long as the examples are self contained (i.e. skippable), then they don't need to be fully explained for the article to make sense.

It might be worth considering giving the article a little different focus; too many of the introductory remarks sound too trite, even for a lay readership. I think that what has fascinated people and what makes this fascination different from their interest in say cars, rocks or alcohol, is their fascination by life itself - the enduring big question is, what is life? Gareth Leng 04:06, 9 November 2006 (CST)


Nancy's Plan

I really was just trying to make a "short and sweet" article on a major page that would be (1) a true and accurate explanation of the subject in (2) inspiring and simple language that might (3) serve as an introduction for an interested user to explore the topic both on (1) CZ and (2) the web. I had hoped to lay a foundation to present major issues in biology -like (1) evolution as opposed to belief in religion's depiction of creation of man, in a concillatory way that was completely true. I wanted the language to be beautiful instead of the conventional routine. But beauty is subjective, after all. I just hope that we can collaborate here and elsewhere better. I never "reverted", by the way. I just went to an older version to retrieve language I thought was good and copied it and pasted it back in so it wouldn't be lost. I have respect for Chris, (especially his work) and the others who made changes and I was trying my best to explain what I was doing. Perhaps we can make a format for editing that is different than the WP wiki - that includes some better way to communicate direction, and that establishes an agreed style so that we don't end up in write-rewrite skirmishes over style?Nancy Sculerati MD 07:02, 9 November 2006 (CST)

Comparing first paragraphs

CZ:

Biology is the science of life. Biologists study all aspects of living things, including all of the many life forms on earth and the processes in them that enable life. These basic processes enable living things to harness energy, to synthesise the many different materials that make up their bodies, to assemble these materials to build organs and structures, to correct errors and repair injuries, to sense their environment and to make sense of it, to reproduce themselves, and to communicate with others.
Life forms have been of interest to all peoples throughout history, and the roots of biology go back to earliest known mankind. Curiosity about the human body and about the bodies of plants and animals remains active in every human society. Much of the interest in living things stems from a wish to better exploit natural resources and to improve health, and has yielded detailed knowledge about plants and animals used to improve the standard of living. Not all plant and animal lore is biological science, however. Biology differs from simple interest in plants, animals, and the human body in using a systematic approach to study, that incorporates an understanding of mathematics, physics, chemistry and other sciences. Importantly, not all interest in gaining knowlege about living things comes about from a desire to apply it, whether or not that interest comes from within biology or elsewhere. The core of that desire is sparked by the need to understand the human condition and the nature of the world.

WP:

Biology (from Greek βίος λόγος, see below) is the branch of science dealing with the study of living organisms. It is concerned with the characteristics, classification, and behaviors of organisms, how species come into existence, and the interactions they have with each other and with the natural environment. Biology encompasses a broad spectrum of academic fields that are often viewed as independent disciplines. However, together they address phenomena related to living organisms (biological phenomena) over a wide range of scales, from biophysics to ecology. All concepts in biology are subject to the same laws that other branches of science obey, such as the laws of thermodynamics and conservation of mass.
At the organism level, biology has partially explained phenomena such as birth, growth, aging, death and decay of living organisms, similarities between offspring and their parents (heredity) and flowering of plants which have puzzled humanity throughout history. Other phenomena, such as lactation, metamorphosis, egg-hatching, healing, and tropism have been addressed. On a wider scale of time and space, biologists have studied domestication of animals and plants, the wide variety of living organisms (biodiversity), changes in living organisms over many generations (evolution), extinction, speciation, social behaviour among animals, etc.

The CZ article shines by comparison. What's the difference? The CZ article is really an attempt to explain the subject, to introduce it to someone who actually needs an article about the subject. The WP article, by contrast, reads like a student's report, regurgitating unexplicated facts, often without rhyme or reason. Consequently, the CZ article (these paragraphs anyway) are actually readable in a way the WP article isn't. As many people have observed, WP articles and its system seem to be set up for the benefit of contributors, while we want to be oriented toward users.

Think of this now: imagine this sort of authoritative, yet readable treatment being given to every subject (or, anyway, hundreds of thousands) in Wikipedia. The result will be, frankly, embarrassing for WP. There won't be any contest. I hate to say it, and this is the first time I've said this or even really thought it, but if we do this well, WP might as well give up.

--Larry Sanger 04:14, 9 November 2006 (CST)

No question, Nancy has made a great start. Style query - the article avoids the first person - personally I prefer to say "the need to understand ourselves" rather than "the need to understand the human condition" etc ?? I think Larry is right - and although all articles will be collaborative, yet we should wish them to be swans not camels, and so each needs a "voice" of its own, and so needs someone to "set the style" in a coherent way. Delighted for Nancy to do that here. Gareth Leng 09:09, 9 November 2006 (CST)

and just as we follow date or spelling styles already set by the aricle, we sould certainly ry to do additions and changes in as close tothe sle of the article as we can, & I hope Nancy wil upgrade if we fall short.DavidGoodman 09:43, 9 November 2006 (CST)

My impression of CZ after 48hrs

Larry, I think you are missing my point. I am not saying that Nancy's paragraphs are worse than WP's. I am saying that they can be copy edited and improved. Apparently Nancy did not agree since she reverted my edits back to the original version.

Nancy, you say that you did not revert "I never "reverted", by the way. I just went to an older version to retrieve language I thought was good and copied it and pasted it back in so it wouldn't be lost.". But this is essentially a revert, actually it's worse, since you lost all the hyperlinks along the way.

Nancy, in multiple places you have stated that you are trying to keep it simple but inspiring:

"inspiring and simple language that might serve as an introduction for an interested user" On this talk page
"I think we need to pull together in format and plain language style in order to be a better reference, more user -friendly." At Citizendium Forums

I think this is a good goal too. And my copy edits were trying to achieve that goal. Look at some of the things you changed back without discussion in one of the sentences.

My version was:

Biological studies of animals fall under the field of zoology, where as the biological study of plants is called botany. Medicine and the health sciences apply biology to understand and improve health, and to cure and alleviate the effects of disease.

Your latest version:

Biologic studies of animals fall under the field of zoology, where as the biologic study of plants is called botany. Medicine and the Health Sciences apply biology to understanding and improving health, and to curing and assuaging the effects of disease.

I have four points here:

  1. Can biologic even be used in this context?
  2. I don't understand how the use of assuage could be regarded as more simple than alleviate.
  3. All the hyperlinks are gone.
  4. You have added capital letters where they are not required (IMO).

I'm not going to go into other changes in detail since it is boring, but in other places you added back typos (knowlege) and you ignored my request for a citation to your claim that "the roots of biology go back to earliest known mankind". I have not heard this claim before. Is it possible you are referring to the beginning of agriculture, but that is a long time after "earliest known mankind"?

Immediately after you "cut and pasted" over my edits you posted the following on the notice board.

"Is your User page filled out? Please put something there if you are active on the pilot wiki. We are not anonymous here, but members of a real community (a welcoming one!)." [1]

I am not sure if this was inspired by me, although, as a new editor I had not edited on my user page or talk page. Nancy, a welcoming community would have addressed my newbie questions on this page above Talk:Biology#Style. It would also be nice if you would have been more thoughtful about my edits before "cutting and pasting". Finally, you could have commented on my talk page and explained to me a bit more about your outline for this page.

I would suggest there needs to be more discussion. If there is a vision for an article it would be helpful if there is an outline. Experts disagree all the time, this is the normal process of editing. Chris Day (Talk) 12:05, 9 November 2006 (CST)

notes from new edits after a major revision -Nancy Sculerati MD 13:12, 10 November 2006 (CST)

I moved the blurb on the word biology back to the top, BUT NOT BECAUSE I THINK IT IS BEST PLACED THERE. " The word biology" narrative may have its own section later in the article, may be put in a standard place for word roots, may be put any place unobtrusive - but cannot be included in the introduction of the article without ringing down the curtain for the audience. On the other hand, it's an important section and should be kept - so I stuck it up there before starting the article.

guinea pigs

Knowing Nancy a litte, I expect she is willing for this article to be used as an trial example. We will gain more by working this way with a number of the intial articles than by any amount of theoretical discussion on the list. WP articles start in various styles, some rather formal, some rather flowery, and many rather drab. I haven't the least preconception of what extent we should keep to a uniform style, or of what it should be (other than not drab. I'd suggest--and I only mean suggest--that normally the beginning of an article should contain an representative very brief introduction to the major themes of the article. For example, Philosophy of biology is probably appropriate for an article of its own, probably jointly written; it should be represented by a section in the general "biology" article, which in turn should be represented by a sentence or two in the lead paragraph(s). Possibly philosophy of life should be another--and similarly religious views about life are not at all the same thing as religious views about the science of biology.

So I tried to change a few phrases myself to make it more exact, trying to use more consistent language, but just to see.

The etymologies are goingto be a problem. Perhaps something could be said in a few words, but a full etymology, afrter the fashion of the OED, takes longer. Which raises the question of the source for the etymologies. We cannot simply copy or slightly abbreviate the OED-- but for many of us, there is no other way to get the information. Perhaps we need an etymology squad.

Style in working is another problem. Some of us, like myself & Nancy, have only a little experience only with WP;some will have none; some have a great deal. Our attitudes to WP conventions will also vary, and our resulting standard of etiquette wsill have to be worked out. Some parts of the prior discussion here seem to reflectthe WP dificulty of separating discussions of substance from discussions of method. To adapt a WP phrase, don't bite each other--we're all newcomers here. DavidGoodman 22:07, 10 November 2006 (CST)

Appropriate?

The third sentence currently reads (my emphasis in bold):

These processes include the making and harnessing of energy, the creation and duplication of the materials that make up the body.

What is meant by making and creation in this sentence? Neither seem suitable in this context. Making should probably be removed since as written it seems to contradict the first law of thermodynamics. Personally, I think synthesis is more accurate than creation. Chris Day (Talk) 23:41, 10 November 2006 (CST)

synthesize

  1. To combine so as to form a new, complex product.
  2. To form or produce by chemical synthesis.

create

  1. To cause to exist; bring into being
  2. To give rise to; produce

Location for etymology

The word biology" narrative may have its own section later in the article, may be put in a standard place for word roots, but cannot be included in the introduction of the article without ringing down the curtain for the audience. It is important and should appear somewhere agreeable in the first approved version of this article. Nancy Sculerati MD

Opening collage

Collage image needed: fabulous shot of earth from space, juxtaposed to images of plants, animals, and people. These should not be "clinical" but visually compelling. Emotional, dynamic- Lion attacking, baby with lopsided smile, best picture of redwood you ever saw, scanning EM, aomeba streaming, the images chosen out of highest commercial grade portfolio rather than 5th grade textbook). [[Best if images are clickable- click lion-it roars, click baby, it laughs etc. This could be done with animations using photo's, ties in to streaming video - would have to be readable as stills to those without fast computers or broadband connections)(also wouldn't be a bad idea to have video/audio narrative of text Nancy Sculerati MD

reference for the interest in living things go back to earliest mankind

I removed the insertion of the "still think we need reference here, etc.,reference for early study etc." that was placed into the text of the article. The placement in the article for this reference to be supplied has succeeded in provoking my answer, but not in what I consider a contructive way - in that it has also succeeded in distraction from finishing a coherent version of the text. Here's my answer: No reference is required, the statement is self-evident. Human beings eat plants and animals. The phrase "the roots of biology" does not mean study, per say, but could mean even interest, note the word "roots" modifying biology. Human beings by their very nature are interested in what sustains their own life, eg, their food.

I am trying to write. Please do not obstruct my work. Please keep comments that do not add but instead inhibit the flow of the existing text to discussion tab. I am not that good of a writer that I can argue each point as I try to write. I am going to have to quit for a while here because I am already out of steam. I don't want to be inappropriately personal, but about 10 days ago, I drove my car into an intersection on a green light, was struck by a speeding van that blew through a red light, my car flew into the air and landed on another car. My car and that third vehicle were totalled. I don't know what happened to the van, because I was totally knocked out for some time. I am typing now with one hand, the other in a very awkward cast, and I was never much of a typist to begin with. I have been asked by another editor to go over this article and try to get it's sound back. Please help me to do that. Nancy Sculerati MD 07:12, 13 November 2006 (CST)

I'm sorry you think my edits are less than constructive. I agree that this should be exciting to read but this should not be at the expense of accuracy. While I agree I am nitpicking on word usage, my aim is that they are edits to improve the accuracy of the article.
Please excuse the insertion with the request for a reference, after watching you edit this article I had assumed such insertions were your modus operandi. I certainly prefer to discuss things on the talk page too and agree that editorial comments in the article inhibit the flow of the existing text. That is why i pasted your two editorial comments above from the article to here. So lets start again. Chris Day (Talk) 10:47, 13 November 2006 (CST)
One way to avoid being interrupted is to work off-line. This can be problematic in active topics in WP, with multiple daily confusing edits, but should be more feasible here.DavidGoodman 00:00, 14 November 2006 (CST)

In the introduction there is a sentence that reads as follows.

"Living organisms have been of interest to all peoples throughout history, and, accordingly, the roots of biology go back to earliest mankind."

Is there a citation for the claim that "the roots of biology go back to earliest known mankind"? I have not heard this claim before. Is it referring to the beginning of agriculture, but that is a long time after "earliest known mankind"? It is not clear to me how far back this implies. What is the evidence they were studying their environment as opposed to being at one with their environment? User:Chris day

No reference is required, the statement is self-evident. Human beings eat plants and animals. The phrase "the roots of biology" does not mean study, per say, but could mean even interest, note the word "roots" modifying biology. Human beings by their very nature are interested in what sustains their own life, eg, their food. User:Nancy Sculerati MD
When I first read the current sentence I had tyhought there was an implication of an event that sparked the biological interest in humans only. But now I read your explanation it would appear that the roots of biology is fuzzy and go back much further than mankind. May be we could modify it to prehistory as suggested by David Goodman? Chris Day (Talk) 10:47, 13 November 2006 (CST)

Suggestion

1) I strongly suggest that we move on. The introductory paragraphs are great for now, but the rest of the article needs to take shape. Then we will certainly need to revisit with a final check and copy edit, but it seems to me that we are leaving the big issues aside, and when the whole shape of the article is clearer we may think differently. The first paragraphs have established a voice and a level that now needs to be extended. The third section on History needs to trace some selected path of the many possible, but I like the idea of picking on one stream of technological change - microscopy - to show how increasing sophistication in our ability to measure things has changed our understanding in fundamental ways.

2) Keeping then to the theme that Biology is inspired by a wish to understand what life is, what are the milestones that we should choose here? Amongst these might be:

  • Viruses and bacteria at the e m level?
  • Images of chromosomes? - Fragile X syndrome?
  • X-ray diffraction alongside a double helix?
  • Imaging of calcium changes in an egg at fertilisation? Video anyone?

3) Then what? ..a grandeur in this view of life..?

3) Then - Classification I think should just go into another article.

4) I don't like the idea of lists within this article - we could just shift the lists to a subarticle and link to them. For now they're a diversion and I can just see them becoming an unwieldy, arbitrary selection that is a source of unproductive controversy.

Let's remember, this article is a gateway, so the snippets we mention here must have somewhere good to go. This article is just the start.Gareth Leng 03:58, 14 November 2006 (CST)

I rescued the classification stuff from the original article since I cannot imagine an article on biology that does not discuss the kingdoms of life. The current section is practically unchanged from the wiki version but i left it all since it gives some insight to the other content here. Likewise the list was just global links that I harvested from the deleted version. Some of these can be incorporated into the article. For now they are just there for context with respect to other content in CZ.
Just out of interest, are we going with templates or similar? The ones such as the Biology footer certainly gives a lot of contextual links in the minimum space. Much of this depends on how the article are to be classified in lieu of categories. The other viable option, as I discussed above, is to reference to a separately maintained list, for example List of biology disciplines. I agree the lists in this overview article are the least desirable option.
As far as milestones, classification wrt to Linnaeus is the foundation for much of modern biology and the diversity of life is still one of the major themes in undergraduate education. Obviously Mendel and Darwin's contributions should be regarded as milestones. With respect to the modern era, many of the milestones have been from a technological perspective. Starting with sequencing proteins and DNA to whole genomes. More recently the huge impact of GFP from an imaging perspective and PCR from a recombinant DNA perspective.
I agree all these milestone are important but at some point the relationships between the different fields of biology should be discussed, especially how the lines of demarcation are becoming blurred. I'm not sure the priority for this article should be to document the history of biology but rather explain the discipline, preferably with as much reference to modern biology as to the nostalgic milestones. A nod to the current trend of BIG biology is probably appropriate too. Chris Day (Talk) 13:44, 14 November 2006 (CST)

Classification is important of course, but this article is just the popular front page of what should become a series of deeper and deeper focussed articles. Here I'd like to see just enough hint of the interest in the kingdoms of life to attract a reader to an article on just that - maybe a snippet about extremophiles?. Similarly with the other "tasters" - and yes, a couple of things at the very forefront would be great.

My own preference is for an article that could be printed off and look good; so I prefer as little clutter as possible. I like the idea of a separate article that is maybe an annotated list, or a map of biology. I wonder if we can't do something imaginative for this on CZ - even just being able to collapse and open sections of a map to see subfields. Footers, I guess the policies on these are up for discussion.

Any number of graphic indexes can be added after we have the articles. They are not mutually exclusive. The only real difficult is the need to keep them up to date and consistent with each other. DavidGoodman 22:39, 14 November 2006 (CST)
This is not really an issue if templates are used (the biology footer is such a template). One change to the original template will be reproduced on all pages that include (transclude) the template. This makes maintenance quite easy. Chris Day (Talk) 22:55, 14 November 2006 (CST)
I wasn't referring to style or wording, but rather to the addition of new topics, which must be assigned a place in each classification scheme where placement is not automatic. WP has not done very well on that score.DavidGoodman 19:42, 15 November 2006 (CST)
Now i get you, I think. In WP, the main problem seems to be that people don't know how to use categories, or should I say, there is no consistent use of categories. Not sure how this will end up here. Specifically, what do you have in mind with respect to problems in keeping them consistent with each other? Is this with respect of how they are labelled or placed in the hierachy? Chris Day (Talk) 02:25, 16 November 2006 (CST)

Who are we aiming at exactly? I guess I have in mind an article that would interest the school student who's just deciding whether to follow a path in Biology to University, and which would be looked on with some pride by anyone who calls themselves a biologist as a suitable advert for their calling.Gareth Leng 16:33, 14 November 2006 (CST)

Need Help with Images, Please

Would like to develop "Development of Biology" with elaboration of theme of fertilization yielding zygote. I have a complex plan for text, would like to incorporate technology theme using microscope. Require several images, that I think I have found. (1) Take look at this link:http://academic.evergreen.edu/v/vivianoc/homunculus.gif That's one I think would be great. Can somebody make sure it's ok to use and upload it?

Next, plain light microscopy human sperm. Here's an example, although I think it's probably copyrighted. http://www.hometrainingtools.com/tbimages/1142.800.600.jpg I think it's important to get a light microscopy picture that is no more than 500 mag, as van L. would not have had higher mag.

Then, SEM image, and maybe others.

Nancy Sculerati MD 20:57, 17 November 2006 (CST)


About the image homunculus.gif, in this site is written: "All content and images on this site are copyrighted by The Evergreen State College." R.Versuri 05:27, 18 November 2006 (CST)

Hi Nancy,

I would be more then happy to try to help you out. I just looked at the first image and it looks like it’s a custom photo from this teacher:

http://academic.evergreen.edu/v/vivianoc/

I highly doubt that it is copyrighted. At the bottom of the page it said the website was last updated in 2000 so that is another reason why I don't think they would care. However, I sent an email and asked for formal permission anyways.

As for the other picture they say that you may use their pictures just as long as you are teaching science and give proper attribution in their terms of use here:

http://www.hometrainingtools.com/faq/our-company/q69.html

I don’t know if this applies for an online encyclopedia however. It looks like a promotional shot for one of their microscopes which would probably make it copyrighted. I do think they would let us use it so I asked for formal permission and I will let you know about the response.

Feel free to just brown the net and don’t be scared to find high quality photos that you want and I will review the copyrights for you. Just let me know if you need anything.

Eric Pokorny 00:31, 20 November 2006 (CST)

Hi Nancy, have you seen the animation in the WP article on DNA? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/DNA I'm envious, should we use it here?Gareth Leng 10:17, 22 November 2006 (CST)

Biology editors-take a look at article discussion please

ADN animation.gif

Yes, Gareth - it looks great, but I'm not able to stick it in the article- can you? Also, I've been slowly trying to fill out the "development" section by using points provided by what others had listed in the "major themes in biology". It's still raw, and much may not yet make clear sense, but I'm hoping I can turn it over to you all in a fairly short time. Do you, or anyone interested, have additional suggestions? Chris? David? Could you tell me your ideas here in discussion? It's hard to maintain a "voice" in the narrative tone of the article with multiple authors editing the text, but certainly you are welcome to make contributions there as well. If you read it at least initially without modification, I hope that you'll see that many past suggestions have been incorporated. It takes me a long time, with many revisions, to get it down - but new suggestions would also get incorporated if chosen to be made here in discussion.

Looking forward to hearing from youNancy Sculerati MD 11:19, 23 November 2006 (CST)

comments--DG

Nancy, you've asked me for general comments. The summary and first paragraphs are in your personal style, and I am not sure how many others will do similar. I do not consider this a problem or disadvantage, because in my personal view there should not be one uniform style; I do not know how others will feel. But I'd certainly defend doing it this way for any similar general article--even though I intend to do nothing of the sort myself.

For the rest, what needs to be done is to outline the different fields, and the different dimensions in which they vary; plant/animal/micro-organism, historical/biographical. etc , and I think this is what you are trying to do. It may be better to do some of this after the next level articles are written, because what you are saying about the early history of biology, for example) must match to some extent what the writer of that article will want to do.

Most of the rest you've written is history of biology. (I think after that, all the different subjects must be at least mentioned and interconnected, and I am not sure you are planning to do so.) I think you give too much detail is some parts, and that you will not be able to sustain the entire article at this depth. I am not sure that all of it is balanced. Aristotle's views on embryonic development are interesting, not least because he got it wrong, and all of this should be explained in a separate article.

To try to accurately summarize historical developments in a sentence is tricky, as I 've found in other subjects, and takes much experimentation at various hands until it comes out correct and understandable--this is one of the areas where the multiple reader of WP sometimes help --and of course sometimes turn into mush. It is in particular very tricky indeed to summarize the meaning of classification and similar subjects. It is even tricky when philosophical roots or historical influences are treated. Writing like "Science is always influenced by past ideas. No scientist can consider any idea, or analyze experimental results without using his or her mind. That mind is both consciously and unconsciously stamped with the culture that produced it." need to be well integrated, not mentioned as asides.

I am not saying that I or any of us could individually have done better. Please don't misunderstand that. This article is merely being used as a convenient example, for it is the first of the science articles to be written from the beginning. DavidGoodman 22:52, 24 November 2006 (CST)

I think this is a great draft, a strong vision for an article that will be distinctive and interesting. Yes I agree fully that handling historical truth and scientific truth too can be very tricky, to simplify without loss of integrity, and this is where our combined expertise will be needed. I think some decisions need to be made to cut some things and develop others - there are a few hanging details that should either be developed or lost I think. There's still a bit of a logical gap in places and I'm wondering if Dreich's work might bridge a gap between the egg and DNA - his experiments (the motivation for vitalism for him) showed that early division of an embryo produces two perfect clones - so the information needed to build the whole is present in the component parts, and of course the explanation for what this vital spark was came with understanding of DNA?Gareth Leng 15:11, 28 November 2006 (CST)

New author from WP POV

Hey ya'll, I just had the opportunity to read your article. If all of CZ comes close to this, we will have something really valuable. I like the tone, narrative form and integration of history that allows the reader to be introduced to the biological sciences in a logical order that flows with the advancements in thought and technology. It also hints at the reductionist mindset that searched deeper and deeper into the origins of life with the microscope, EM, DNA, etc., while still being able to expose the lateral tangents of specialities such as marine biology, and emergent qualities of complex interconnectedness of ecological communities. All held together with a common theme of "where did we come from" that won't let the reader stop until they get to the end. Almost makes me want to be a biologist;) Good work! --D. Matt Innis 20:58, 29 November 2006 (CST)

Some comments on the first section

From a whole article perspective I wonder if the section titles are a bit too long. It might be better to be more concise and have a sub title to expand on the idea of each section. Specifically I read throught the 'scope of biology' section. i made a few copy edits but have saved major comments for here.

Whether scientific thinking about these issues is compatible with religious beliefs is itself contentious.

I find this sentence to be hanging. By saying "is itself contentious" seems to imply that the previous questions posed (When did life begin? What is life?), are also contentious. Is this the intent? Why not something along the lines of: "But whether scientific thinking about these issues is compatible with religious beliefs is contentious."

Some religious leaders have deplored the scientist's mechanistic view of nature that removes the requirement for active intervention by the divine.

Is this true? I don't think scientists remove the requirement for active intervention by the divine. The problem is that it can't be tested and therefore is not encompassed by science.

In this view, mathematical equations and the language of prophets are simply two different forms of human expression, each attempting to describe a higher dimension than ordinary humans experience.

It seems that others here like this type of big picture view, but i have to ask is this really topical for this article? I like the Crick reference but this is getting to be too far from biology. It seems to be more appropriate in the article on science.

Although science addresses fundamental issues about life, biology is also used to answer practical questions, which are posed to advance medical and dental care, agriculture and animal husbandry.

Again this sentence seems to be skipping between the umbrella of science and biology. Why "science addresses" rather than "biologists address"?

It is through applied biology that the health sciences became such effective healing arts and that the world's food supply has become both safer and more plentiful.

Here I don't understand the reference to healing arts. It seems to imply that medicine is a healing art, yet healing art does not appear to include modern medicine. Shouldn't this be more along the lines of "It is through applied biology that the health sciences transformed the healing arts into modern medicine" or something similar? Another related issue here is that the healing arts article should be titled Healing arts not Healing Arts otherwise healing arts will have to be piplinked every time it is mentioned in an article.

  1. (see Albert Einstein for detailed discussion with references).
  2. Many of the academic disciplines that make up biology are listed at the bottom of this article along with a brief description.
  3. Further information about each is provided through links to other articles within Citizendium that can be accessed by clicking each discipline's name.

I have general question with regard to the three editorial comments that appear in the article. Can't we assume they know to click on links for more information? These types of comments seem unnecessary for articles. Chris Day (Talk) 02:24, 30 November 2006 (CST)

All good points, and I've tried to addresss them as I agree with them. Couple of minor things,

I'm quite anxious to avoid mixed metaphors, (sorry it's a wee bugbear of mine). Things like "roots" of biology, and can you spark a core? I'll do an edit for those sometime, don't mean to dull the language.

On where it goes - I think we need to mention the Human Genome project, the shock at the low number of genes, and then in the last para might go into systems biology as a post genomic way forward?Gareth Leng 09:03, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Medicine is a healing art. Biology is a science. Root has a well-recognized meaning that is not associated with plants, see Oxford Eng Dict. II. 6. a. The source or origin of some quality, condition, tendency, etc. I would argue that if a desire can be sparked, then the core of desire is also inflammable. Please smile, guys. Come on, there is a fine line between correction and nit-picking, language can only be changed to a point 'by commitee' without changing an essay into a list of words. Nancy Sculerati MD 09:37, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Nancy, please read our comments with a more jovial tone, you did ask for comments above. I think you are missing my smile and my effort to work with you on this article, I was the one that added the sparked mixed metaphor. Nevertheless, some of my comments above I do consider to be important issues, one I'll remention since no one has commented on this yet. The article writes: "scientist's mechanistic view of nature that removes the requirement for active intervention by the divine", but in what way does science remove the the requirement for active intervention? As far as I am aware the most we can say here is that the scientific method can not test for active invention by the divine. This might be viewed as nitpicking but the way it is currently written sounds like it's anti-religion. As we all know, science is not anti-religion, it just has nothing to say about religion.
I am not trying to force anything into or out of the article which is why I put the comments here on the talk page rather than making the edits myself. All my comments here are for you to take or leave. Above many good things have been said about this article, but what you really need to hear are your peers pointing out the weaker parts. This does not mean we are saying this article is bad. I, for one, am trying to be contructive and help you see areas that could be improved. Chris Day (Talk) 11:12, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Nancy Challenges You To Create An Approval Process

Nobody says this has to be the last article written on the subject, but it seems to me that it is complete and accurate enough to have a protected version generated and the approval process - which as you know is not at all worked out- to be started. This would be the very first article to start that process and the input for how it should proceed deserves the attention of you all. As we have already shown here, if we dwell on each editors preference for each word looking for unanimous consensus we are likely to simply continually unwrite and rewrite without notable progress.Yeah, the Human Genome Project is interesting and important, but it is a fool's task to encompass all that is interesting and important into a little essay on a major subject. Does the essay introduce the subject? Does it serve the goals outlined in the plan? There are illustrations to find and additional readings to pick. This article, once approved, is not cut in stone but refreshed on the web. Nobody says that it even has to be the ONLY article on biology, maybe it could be Biology (General) and there could be another version that is Biology (Professional Level). We have talked about having different levels. Nobody says that even if approved it could not be out on a wiki to be continually edited, and whatever it morphs into might eventually replace it as the approved article.

Perhaps we can have a category of approved articles that are off the wiki, meaning putting them in that category protects them, but there would also be an ongoing draft article of the same name. Like Category: Protected Current Approved Version for Biology (general) and Biology (general) in Category: Open Version Draft in Progress. I think it's important to distinguish between the two for reasons of liability, as well as keeping track of what we have approved and what's changing. Still, that leaves the approval process itself un-addressed.

Who has pragmatic ideas for an approval process? Nancy Sculerati MD 09:37, 30 November 2006 (CST)

This is an important article for CZ because it will be the first or one of the first to be approved - and obviously it's gtting there. I think it's important therefore that it really is exceptional - i.e. what would be Feature article standard for WP and better. We need images, and we need to feel happy not just that this article can be approved, but that this is one of our showcase products. We all want this to be great, and we all want to see it as something we feel as proud to have been part of as possible. We can take images from WP for now, but it would be nice to find new ones - unfortunately that's something I've not worked out how to do well myself. Matt I know is good at this though.. :) Gareth Leng 12:29, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Yes, Gareth, I did some on WP. I was looking earlier when Nancy was asking about it and noticed that the copyright process is different here on CZ. It does not seem to be as stringent. I am concerned that it will get us into trouble if we publish something that is not public domain, so I will look for those first. Give me some ideas of what you want. I noticed the animated DNA on the talk page, do you want it in the article? --D. Matt Innis 14:31, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Approval process here is complicated in that we shouldn't approve this ourselves as authors but need another party - and I guess for major showcase articles we need care. Gareth Leng 12:33, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Conceptually, the writer(s) need to think they're ready, it has to be copyedited (I don't think any of the copy-editors have yet been appointed, but a number of editors said they'd be willing to do this also) , and there needs to be an editor or editors, however volunteered/selected/drafted --and whether selected at the beginning or the end of the writing.
I think that this is at least 3 different people--no one can copy-edit their own writing all that well, and though in the RW editors often do it themselves, I think that given the method of composition, another check is required.
I think of the work you--and we-- have been doing here is collaborative writing, not editing in the CZ sense. (it would be "editing" in WPm but that's what we're trying to get away from.)
And the appinted editor was also I think going to have the editing discussed in the workgroup at least.
There's a discussion on this in the "approval standards" part of the "Editors" forum, and I think we probably should move the discussion there, as it's of general interest. DavidGoodman 12:44, 30 November 2006 (CST)


Readings

This needs some more: 1 or 2 standard textbooks, possibly some more general books. Though they may fit into other sections also, at least 4 or 5 should be given here, and possibly some more diverse outside sites. But perhaps you are about to do it. DavidGoodman 13:27, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Please give suggestions. Nancy Sculerati MD 16:14, 30 November 2006 (CST)

Images

see [2] Check out [3] especially [4] re Darwin Gareth Leng 14:38, 30 November 2006 (CST)

I also found this, but it is not credited to Leeuwenhoek? --D. Matt Innis 22:03, 30 November 2006 (CST)
Oh but it is just so perfect!! Please put it inGareth Leng 08:40, 1 December 2006 (CST)
Your wish is my command:) --D. Matt Innis 10:15, 1 December 2006 (CST)
The EM Epstein Barr picture to the right was from #2 above. I can get any of the other ones that you might want as well. --D. Matt Innis 22:26, 30 November 2006 (CST)
This electron microscopic image of two Epstein Barr Virus virions (viral particles) shows round capsids—protein-encased genetic material—loosely surrounded by the membrane envelope

Does anyone have any photos of their own that they might be willing to donate? I don't, I'm pretty pitiful as a photographer. Also- can anyone program the DNA image so that it's still unless clicked? I think the animation is great - but distracting on the page if you try to read on-line. Nancy Sculerati MD 16:16, 30 November 2006 (CST)

I'm never satisfied with my photos either and I could not see any way to stop the DNA animation. I think someone would have the right software to reprogram it. --D. Matt Innis 22:03, 30 November 2006 (CST)



I think we have to use this!! Image:Sperm-egg.jpg|right|300px|thumb|A spermatozoon fertilising an ovum On Nancy's point, we could maybe replace the animation with a still but give a link to the animation?

I'll work on that too. --D. Matt Innis 10:15, 1 December 2006 (CST)

What about some Vesalius? Not sure. http://blpc.bl.uk/learning/images/bodies/illustrations/vesalius-st.jpg or Galen? http://www.karlloren.com/images/Medieval_Anatomy_1.JPG Oh, 'please check this out [5] (One of the most fascinating features of sea urchins is 'Aristotle’s lantern'. This complex device for grinding food consists of an elaborate musculature and 40 calcareous plates, and was first described by Aristotle)

doesn't take much to make you happy does it? its a sea urchin;) --D. Matt Innis 10:18, 1 December 2006 (CST)
My you are busy:) --D. Matt Innis 10:15, 1 December 2006 (CST)

The mitochondrion picture is great - can anyone rescale it to be a bit smaller? Gareth Leng 07:13, 1 December 2006 (CST)

The scaling feature in CZ doesn't work yet, but I can shink it and redownload... However, when I did that I couldn't read the words:) Still want it smaller? --D. Matt Innis 10:15, 1 December 2006 (CST)
I don't think it is a good idea to upload a small picture because the scaling does not work. Especially if the text becomes illegible. The solution, for now, is to just link to the picture image:mitochondria.jpg without it being visble. I am assuming it is trivial to get the scaling to work. Chris Day (Talk) 13:41, 1 December 2006 (CST)
I agree, especially with text. We could do this, too:
Though, it means they have to click on it. Not quite the same as seeing it automatically. --D. Matt Innis 14:34, 1 December 2006 (CST)

Hey thanks Matt, so good to be working with you again, the homunculus is just great. Mitochondria - well you know, what can I say, bigger better for now.Gareth Leng 11:22, 1 December 2006 (CST)

I like the idea of being able to click on some things to get images - is there any way that our own legend can appear with the image when we do that?Gareth Leng 06:52, 2 December 2006 (CST)
Every picture that we link too could be our own. All we have to do is upload the picture and write our own description. Uploading our own versions is probably a requirement for other reasons. To make a montage that fits tightly together the pictures need to have the correct aspect ratios. For the images to have the correct impact some will have to be cropped. So the first requirement is to pick the pictures we think best represent the topic. I had started selecting some of the best from wikicommons here following Nancy's earlier requests. There are two spots free that require some cropping of pictures. I have my eye on a beautiful SEM of pollon grains and a toadstool. The only problem then is that bacteria are not represented, I could not find a suitably dramtic photo. Nancy had requested an attacking lion and that one in the linked montage is the best available. It would be better, in my mind, if we had one that included the lion's prey in the picture too, unfortunately there is nothing in commons. This is a start, however, I suggest we choose the photo's we think are the best available and most topical before creating the montage itself. Chris Day (Talk) 11:36, 3 December 2006 (CST)


Montage.jpg
Here is a copy of the montage I have put together in wikicommons using some of their better photos. As I mentioned above, it can be seen here and each photo can be clicked to link to the original. Unfortunately, since the resize photo feature in CZ is non functionale, the code I used to write that photo-table montage does not work in CZ.
Can you add in text box, below the photo-montage, the name of each organism? You can add something of the kind present in Wikipedia's Biology article: "Biology studies the variety of life (clockwise from top-left) E. coli, tree fern, gazelle, Goliath beetle". Thanks. Yuval Langer 13:50, 13 December 2006 (CST)
That was the idea although i was waiting for the picture scaling bug to be fixed before continuing. At present all the images in this article are substitute images. Plus the final montage figure has not really been finalised, although with the current approved version I guess it has been finalised. Chris Day (Talk) 14:16, 13 December 2006 (CST)

I hadnt been reading the talk page and this is after the event but I actually rescaled the mitochondrion a few days ago. Glad to learn that soft-rescaling is not yet operational, saves me time trying to learn why Im makeing coding errors!. If you are after bacterial images I can find a few. We have them by the zillions in my teaching department. David Tribe 15:32, 12 December 2006 (CST)

With regard to the content, one problem is that we are lacking a picture of bacteria. I am thinking a hot spring might be a good one for that example, similar to this one in Yellowstone NP. I'll probably be messing around a bit more to try and incorporate it if others like the way this is going. Any other must have pictures you have seen? Chris Day (Talk) 23:54, 3 December 2006 (CST)
Wow, Chris, that looks great! I like it. Even if we went with it the way it is. --D. Matt Innis 16:28, 4 December 2006 (CST)

Anthony.Sebastian recent [12/01/2006] edits

Some references to "3rd pgraph" really 4th pgraph.

Some concern about early introduction in article of science vs. religion controversy.

Consider article as a whole a tour de force.

Welcome, Anthony. I've avoided your phrase 'On Earth' just to avoid possible distraction re extraterrestrial life. I don't think we should get deep into the religious controversy but just acknowledge it. Maybe we should link into a footnote to reference Dawkins book? Gareth Leng 06:43, 2 December 2006 (CST)
Thanks, Gareth. I had intended the phrase "on Earth" to do double duty, focusing on life on Earth, as currently biology restricts itself to Earth's living things, and as an idiom referring to 'among all the possibilities', as in 'How on Earth did you find that outfit'. A little double entendre with the second meaning slightly humorous.
I don't think we should introduce the science vs. religion at all, especially early on in the article. It requires a more extensive and balanced treatment, either as a separate section or separate article. --TonySeb 11:59, 2 December 2006 (CST)
Agreed. It will appear in several topics as well as of course evolution. For evolution, we probably will need for clarity an article on the modern theory of evolution, presenting it as the scientific consensus is, without the debate. Then we do need articles both on the 19th century debate, which is reasonably well covered by the present WP article on Darwin, as well as the contemporary controversy, which in WP is dealt with very poorly (in my opinion) in a number of places. And then we need one on Philosophy of Biology, which [perhaps should be done in conjunction with the philosophy group. For this article, I'd just put links to a few such obvious places.

Links

What's our policy on wikilinks here? My feeling is that we should be conservative, link only to good articles that are directly relevant or which might be needed for understanding - so for example I wouldn't link to mathematics etc Any views on this?Gareth Leng 07:03, 2 December 2006 (CST)

Linking is often wildly overused, but I think just a little more linking than you suggest is a good idea, namely also linking to a) related areas (so I would include mathematics, as another science) and b), to be vague, a limited amount of areas of genuine interest that readers might not be aware there are articles on. For example, from this article: "At some point, probably somewhere in the fertile Nile delta ...". Knowledge of the Nile delta is not really necessary for understanding the article, but it is nonetheless something that might catch a reader's interest and linking it gives them the opportunity to pursue it further. Generally, I would say that linking is not only to help readers understand the article's topic, but also to accommodate the browsing reader (which is quite a large proportion of readers, I would say). (But emphatically not any article that happens to exist). Also, I think it is best to link each article once, the first time it's mentioned. Damien Storey 08:23, 2 December 2006 (CST)

My opinion:I think that links, like references, should be minimized in the text. They are generally distracting and often superfluous. Now, if a word or phrase has an obvious meaning then I'd argue that just because we can find an internal link does not mean we should. For example, unless mathematics links to a show case article, why stick in a hyperlink? Same for 'mankind'. On the other hand, if the link is for a word like DNA or Darwin, that would send the interested reader "down the rabbit hole" to a pertinent fund of knowledge, then I think that's good. Also, a reader who is very familiar with either will probably choose to read on, where as a person who really isn't sure what those words mean can find out. Personally. one aspect of WP that works against its content (to me anyway) is the apparent contest among readers to stick a hyperlink and reference to practically every word. That is a style CZ can best eliminate rather than emulate. If anybody who speaks English fluently understands the words, and there is no considered reason to point them to the article, then no reason to have the text change color. Similarly, I don't think the second line of this article needs a footnote to bring us down to Etymology. Why not let Etymology just stand on its own as the last, or near last, section of the article? [User:Nancy Sculerati MD|Nancy Sculerati MD]] 08:43, 2 December 2006 (CST)

In general I agree with the Nancy. Consider some of the newer WP articles eg WP:Napthaleneto see the use of links, which in general is more restrained than it used to be. Remember that links are normally made only at the first mention of a word, unless there's a real need to link again to a subtopic when it's discussed again later--so they should normally not be very heavy later down.

But remember we are writing for readers who do not nevessarily know about changing the way links appear.


There has been an ongoing issue between religion and science for hundreds of years that still concerns millions of people. In the US there are several school districts that are concerned about exactly how biology is taught for those reasons. There are scientists who are 'faith based athiests' and vigorously object to notions like 'the soul', and there are religious individuals who believe that teaching evolution undermines the student's possible salvation. There are plenty of references to both in the world's literature, including such journals as Nature and newspapers like The New York Times. It is important to offer a conciliatory view and its inclusion is one of the better features of the article.

Matt, I love your pictures. I'll look into the programming over the next weeks. Chris, I do like that collage you came up with, it's odd that it has so many of the images that I had mentioned as possible. I'd never seen it.

Gareth, I'd like to change the word 'enigmas' in the intro back to something more street-wise, you silver-tongued Brit. By the way, I like the whole Human Genome thing, meaning I like how you worked it in. I do think we should move on though, and start on some new articles.

David, I think you hit the nail on the head with your phrase Collaborative writing. That's what we seem to be doing, and it's fun, because we all learn, plus it enables the article to have a voice. It's not easy and it's impromptu rather than rule-bound. It's like a scholarly jam session for those who take pleasure in thinking about these subjects.

Damien, for browsing, I think we can figure out a way to put internal links at the bottom of the article in a separate section instead of having interference of the flow of text.

Nancy Sculerati MD 08:43, 2 December 2006 (CST)

I'm not sure about that: for example, should the link to Nile delta be put at the bottom of the article? Damien Storey 08:50, 2 December 2006 (CST)
IMHO The purpose of wikilinks is multi-fold: At the basic level, they provide expansion of difficult words or terms used. They are also used to point to logical extensions on the subject of the article for linear follow on reading. Sideways addition reading on parallel or sister subjects should also be provided.
The linked terms should not be too high brow. While an adult may know that Botany and Zoology are subsets of biology, links should also be provided on low brow terms, piped to the relevant article, so that younger readers can make use of the site. (e.g. I paraphrase, 'Biology includes the [ [Botany|study of plants] ].')
Links should still be made if the targeted article is of poor quality or even if the article does not yet exist. The red link or prominent low quality page should prompt other authors to write or improve the bad page. Omitting the link will result in the loss of the potential for improvement of the bad article.
The visual appearance of a large number of links is to some extent irrelevant. While the current default link colour is bright blue, this can be changed. It is also within the scope of each individual CZ user to set his own individual preferences.
In general, I don't like long lists of links at the end of articles. A article should finish with the same boldness as it started. It shouldn't whimper away into excessive listings of trivia at the end as is so common on WP articles. Derek Harkness 10:34, 2 December 2006 (CST)
The place to put the trivia is nowhere, in WP its a way of avoiding edit wars on th main content. But the external links and the references-- where else can we put them? The end is where such things go in books. It's good having them together.DavidGoodman 19:15, 2 December 2006 (CST)
I personally like the links in the body of the article. Certainly it sometimes leads me in directions that I did not intend, but I always learn something and that is what makes electronic media so interactive and draws us in. We can go where we want when we want. I know it might put the onus on the author to keep the readers attention to the end, but if the reader doesn't know what one of the words means, they probably aren't ready to comprehend the rest of the article. After awhile, we all stop seeing the blue anyway, but it's nice to see it when we are questioning our own knowledge. The red is another story, but Derek makes a good argument for building purposes. I don't see any reason why we can't take a link off if it seems to be redundant or unnecessary. --D. Matt Innis 22:18, 2 December 2006 (CST)
WRT David's comments, There is no rule that says external links must go at the end and internal links must go in the text. There's nothing to prevent you linking to an external site in the prose of the article. At the end you may want to mention a few sites or pages that provide additional reading. However, this could be done as prose with comments introducing those sites/pages rather than just listing URLs.
As for references, there is an on going discussion on the forums about how to better reference our articles. The current system, inherited from WP, is not the best but we have to live with it for now.
To finish, two general comments about links: We should avoid making links within section headlines. (e.g. don't do = = [ [Section title] ] = =) Apparently the wikimedia software has a bug and links in the section titles messes with the article's menu system — And lastly, remember to check pages that you are linking to so as not to point to a alternative spelling (leaving a red link that should be blue) or to a disambiguation page that could only confuse the reader. Allot of time is waisted on WP fixing links that point to disambiguation pages. Derek Harkness 22:49, 2 December 2006 (CST)

Terminology: "life" vs. "living things"

I would like to make a pitch for substituting "living things" for "life" whenever possible in the Biology article.

When we say biologists study "life", we really mean they study "living things". The word "life" nominalizes, or technically, reifies, the processes that occur in living things that enable them to remain alive. One cannot answer the question, "What is life?, without answering the question, "What processes constitute the activity of living?

We cannot attribute to biology the science of life, because its science does not investigate an abstraction. It studies the tangible, the proceses that occur in living things.

For the sentence "Biology is the science of life", I substituted "Biology is the science of living things". No reason given for changing it back.

"Life" has no specificity. We even speak of inanimate things as having life, as in the useful life of a car or battery. Biologists do not study cars or batteries, although some living things transport other livings and others generate electricity.

Some will say I quibble. That's life. Anthony Sebastian 15:23, 3 December 2006 (PST)

I wanted this article to convey the sense of excitement and challenge, and biology is about the differences between living things and non-living things, and that's life. I guess I thought that the 'science of living things' didn't convey this for me, it sounded a bit flat, as though its about the things and that they happen to be living is almost incidental. We do much more than study the things, but go beyond to ask the abstract ot higher level questions, like what makes this alive? and this I saw as a question that catches everyone's imagination as being an eternal and enduring challenge to understanding. What makes what a biologist do different from what a physicist does? I think it is in part these big, abstract questions that lurk beyind all we do. However, I'm easy, I'll go with whatever consensus there is.Gareth Leng 05:19, 4 December 2006 (CST)

Gareth, you seem reluctant to advance beyond the "received" terminology--received from as early as 1200 A.D. according to OED, which at any rate defines "life" in terms of "living" matter as opposed to non-living matter: "The condition or attribute of living or being alive..."; "The property which constitutes the essential difference between a living animal or plant, or a living portion of organic tissue, and dead or non-living matter...". Perhaps "Biology is the science of living matter" would appeal to you more, getting, as it does, away from "things". That definition would seem to cover biology in its broadest sense. The question, not "what is life?", but "what makes it that matter can live?" You said it: "what makes this alive?" --Anthony Sebastian 13:54, 9 December 2006 (PST)
As an author, I agree that when I read "life" it opened a much bigger door, after all, wasn't that really how biology started - looking for that "spark" of life? I think it is more than semantics, it does mean more. The question is whether you editors want it to mean more. --D. Matt Innis 07:40, 4 December 2006 (CST)
Matt, yes, looking for the 'spark' of life. As if a 'spark' or 'force' or 'spirit' needed. We don't need to respect the origins of biology by acceding to its outmoded thinking. Now we look for the physical processes that distinguish living matter from non-living matter. Michaelangelo could bring life out of a marble stone but he couldn't make it a living thing. ----Anthony Sebastian 14:08, 9 December 2006 (PST)
I see where you're coming from and it certainly simplifies things, but, isn't biology still looking for the physical/chemical 'spark' that defines life?. IOW, doesn't biology also include the sciences that study why we love, we hate, we marry and we feel a need to believe (things that define "life" more than just living)? If not, then it would follow that biology is just accepting that there was a 'spirit' that guides these factors. Certainly these things can be explained in ways other than 'spiritual'. Though it is safer. --D. Matt Innis 17:30, 9 December 2006 (CST)
And are viruses alive or not? Scientists can't even agree on this, so it might be worth giving it a nod in the article. Chris Day (Talk) 08:09, 4 December 2006 (CST)

Nancy:

Your defining biology as the science of life in no way disaccords with conventional views or terminology. In my defining biology as the science of living things, or as I now prefer, the science of living matter, I wanted to try to move beyond conventional thinking and introduce a more rigorous terminology. I took my lead from a respected biologist, Ernst Mayr, “one of the 20th century's leading evolutionary biologists” (Wikipedians 2006).

Ernst Mayr, in his last decade as a centenarian, wrote a book called This is Biology: The Science of the Living World (Mayr 1997). One might have considered the title presumptuous had it not come from someone the likes of Ernst Mayr. I believe in his subtitle he chose to ‘define’ biology as “the science of the living world”, rather than as “the science of life”, because in his opening chapter, What Is the Meaning of “Life” [his quotation marks], he states:

"To elucidate the nature of this entity called "life" has been one of the major objectives of biology. The problem here is that "life" suggests some "thing" -- a substance or force -- and for centuries philosophers and biologists have tried to identify this life substance or vital force, to no avail. In reality, the noun "life" is merely a reification of the process of living. It does not exist as an independent entity. One can deal with the process of living scientifically, something one cannot do with the abstraction "life". One can describe, even attempt to define, what living is; one can define what a living organism is; and one can attempt to make a demarcation between living and nonliving. Indeed, one can even attempt to explain how living, as a process can be the product of molecules that themselves are not living." (Mayr 1997, page 2).

I suggest taking Ernst Mayr’s lead, defining biology as the science of living matter, adds precision and rigor of terminology to CZ’s article, “Biology”, and modernizes thinking about the nature of biology as a science.

With that said, I still feel completely comfortable deferring to your and the groups’ judgment, and remain impressed with the work you did to rewrite the article from scratch.

References

Mayr, Ernst (1997), This is Biology: The Science of the Living World (Cambridge, Mass: Belknap Press of Harvard University Press)
Wikipedians. Ernst Mayr. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ernst_Mayr . 2006.

---Anthony.Sebastian 19:51, 11 December 2006 (CST)

Getting close

Good idea Chris - made me think, perhaps we can get this and some other thought provoking questions into the legends of the composite images? On Approval - this is an article written by experts at a popular level and maybe its approval should be gauged by how well it meets that ambition - perhaps we should invite Larry Sanger to oversee the approval of this article, especially as it may well be the "first" to be approved, so why not let him judge how well it meets his hopes for CZ, when we think we're ready. I think we'll be ready to ask when we have the images, and then we can move on?Gareth Leng 10:20, 4 December 2006 (CST)

Since we are the first group to have an article ready, I suggest we first have a formal approval by 2 of us, as is presumably going to be the pattern. They could then ask Larry to collaborate. Testing it with less experienced people would also be a good idea, if they decided to do that. (As I originally had a totally different conception of the article, I'd rather not be one of this group)DavidGoodman 14:08, 4 December 2006 (CST)
I'll make up some sort of temporary approval template in the next day or so. --ZachPruckowski 15:27, 4 December 2006 (CST)
OK, we now have an article approval template. To see it in use, check out my user page (which is obviously a demostration for testing purposes, and not an actual approved article). It currently isn't "locked" in any way (someone who has sysop can do that later, after it's "finished"), and it needs to be cooler looking, and ideally also easier to use. --ZachPruckowski 16:34, 4 December 2006 (CST)

Aristotle

I removed the following sentence:

"It might also have come from examining the seeds of some trees, where the entire immature plant is contained within the husk, and springs into independent life as a young tree once planted."

I can see how this might have inspired him to think of the concept of the homunculus, but, at present, this does not seem to be the emphasis. Currently the paragraph seems to emphasise the woman vs male contribution more and so I deleted it out for now. It is also confusing since if Aristotle did use the plant for inspiration, it was based on a misconception. The analogous idea, from the perspective of a plant, would be that the plant equivalent was in the pollon, not in the seed. Chris Day (Talk) 23:56, 4 December 2006 (CST)

Consistency

What date format will be the final one here? Currently we have "20th century" and "Twentieth Century" styles intermingled throughout. Chris Day (Talk) 00:04, 5 December 2006 (CST)

So far there has been little discussion on manuals of style other than to say "we need one". For consistency with other articles, I'd say we should follow the WP manual of style pages until we decide on something better, later. So for dates with centuries, use 1st, 2nd, 3rd, 4th and "century" with a small "c". E.g. "20th century". For years, use numbers like 1984. There is no need to append AD. For dates BC, you should append like "246 BC." If the date is approximate, use c. or circa e.g. "c. 246BC" For exact dates to the day, use month day, year or day month, year. e.g. "January 1st, 1984" or "the 1st of January, 1984"
It may be that this style is changed at sometime in the future, should be decide to depart form the WP style manual. But at least by sticking to the WP manual for now we can possibly automate any alterations later.
I agree with this approach. It is the only feasible way to start, remembering that some subjects will differ. Even there, I would follow the established conventions of WP for such fields for the time being. DavidGoodman 19:13, 5 December 2006 (CST)

I say Biology is Science of life is the way it should be in approved version

Come on, guys, do you seriously believe that Biology is not the science of life? Or that the phrase "living things" is indisputably more accurate than the word "life"? Sorry, it ain't so. I strongly object to the change, especially since it markedly degrades the literary quality of the piece for no unambiguous reason. I really object to this new opening. Nancy Sculerati MD 08:09, 9 December 2006 (CST)

Also-can we put that collage of Chris' that's here on the talk page in the beginning of the article? Is it possible to put it to the right of the contents box- in that blank space? Nancy Sculerati MD 10:14, 9 December 2006 (CST)

I put a scaled down version in where you were asking so you could get a feel for what you want until Chris gets back. When the scaling feature gets fixed in CZ, then we can go back to the first verion and get exactly what you want. You can move it around anywhere you want by cutting and pasting from there. The article is looking really good. I like life vs living things. --D. Matt Innis 12:35, 9 December 2006 (CST)
For those interested there are two other possible montages to be seen. Not to mention many other very good photos that are not included in any of the current montage choices. I particularly like the SEM of the drosophila eye. The tigers roar might be more dramatic than the current lion. See what you think. Chris Day (Talk) 21:59, 9 December 2006 (CST)

religion and science

"conciliatory view was mentioned. I do not think we should intend to offer a conciliatory view. I think we intend to offer an objective view, which in this particular case may not be the same thing at all. For some such contentious topics--even ones with less emotion involved-- the difficulty of present a fair view in a sentence or two is extremely difficult, and the solution is to defer the discussion on more detailed pages. I can't imagine a reader who would not know to look at the evolution or the Darwin article as a place to start. DavidGoodman 15:16, 9 December 2006 (CST)

I personally know a number of people, adults, who are very bright and successful in business, finance and sports who would not have a clue. Years ago, I had a friend running for the U.S. Senate who was suprised to find out that my cat had a heart. It amazes me, too. Still, many people, even if they are not religious themselves, have a popular notion that science is against God. There really are people out there who are literate and bright enough to follow the text we are writing here, and yet honestly will be learning because they are not really sure what biology is. Isn't that who we should be writing for? Others can use it too, but I think it should include everyone and not assume knowledge.Nancy Sculerati MD 09:01, 10 December 2006 (CST)

I like the way that religion is introduced here, and think it's handled well; I see the approach taken as being objective, rather than conciliatory; the secular position is described unapologetically, but without being confrontational. I think that an interesting article need not shy away from indicating areas of wide interest, and yes of course this needs to lead to articles of greater depth.Gareth Leng 12:03, 10 December 2006 (CST)

links

Many apparently absurd WP links are made for a purpose. The links from years is a way of getting a list of all things that happened in that year. Many of the links from places are meant to give a list of everything relevant to the place. I am not quite sure we will want to do either one of them. If we do, although they cannot really be added properly by a bot, it would not be hard to do manually. People wanting such list can always go to WP. Linking the divisions of a subject or cognate subjects is an obvious use. Linking to biographical articles, though it can look very dense, is the only way to indicate them, since not every name mentioned will have an article. The sort of absurd links to ordinary words that happen to be used in an article is, of course, absurd, and I'm even seeing less of it in WP than I used to find.

Links versus see also: Even in paper encyclopedias &c. there are sometimes bold face links in the middle of text to indicate related articles. Given hyperlinking, I think the users will now expect them. There's a convention (often not followed) in WP that see also's are given only for terms not linked, under the assumption that the link was sufficient. The alternative is to have something like the traditional library: Broader subjects: Related: Narrower: with narrower and broader going only 1 level down or up. I mention these just to list the possibilities--I am not sure what style is best. DavidGoodman 15:16, 9 December 2006 (CST)

subdisciplines and Biology today

There has been discussion in the forums about the bio article. Zach and Chris, and David Goodman and others have pointed out the lack of "biology today" as compared to "development of biology" and the advantage to a sort of central spot for the article in a reference sense. I had replied: in earlier versions, there was a clickable outline of biology to follow the essay part. A sort of reader's guide that helped the user explore more on biology in CZ. I remember that you had filled a lot of that in, Zach. When it disappeared, I was quite sorry to see it go. I am not sure why there is that length message of the byte limit. I do understand that in WP many articles end in silly lists, but for an article "covering" a huge field, like this biology article, there is value to having an explicit reader's guide included in a formal section towards the end. That's the kind of feature where uniformity does have value, and might be repeated in all similar articles on giant subjects that have whole sets of subdisciplines. When I was kid, I inherited a set of ancient (WW II era) Compton Encyclopedia. The last volume was an index that had short entries, so it was readable rather than just a list of names and subjects- but it referenced the whole set in that index.I think the way we had it, the "Fields within Biology" list, helped guide the reader the same way that old index helped guide me. We might even expand it so that there were two or three sentences about each sub discipline instead of just a phrase. I open that to the group. I found that the list was moved to a separate page. I moved the contents back. Do you think it is better this way? Should we expand the descriptions a little? If we keep it this way, we need to fix the links and delete the orphan page. Or is it better the other way? Nancy Sculerati MD 19:40, 11 December 2006 (CST)

Hello, should you add microbiology? what about immunology? virology? mycology? bacteriology? these last 4 would be subheadings of microbiology but they are much different then cellular biology. -Tom

Thanks,Chris for those last changes. Are we there yet? Can we vote on approval?

Personally, I think that the article is "good enough" to be approved. Since I made the plan, I don't think I should push the "approve" button. From the Forums, it seems that Larry is happy if 3 editors agree to approve. If you do, please record that approval here. If you don't, please state what aspect of the article PREVENTS its approval. So we can fix it. Nancy Sculerati MD 10:43, 12 December 2006 (CST)

My view is that Nancy has put a lot into literary style, and that her judgement is good. Much of the qubbling is argually true in some sense, but the changes mooted detract from the aesthetics and the arguments to do so are not compelling. Weve got a LOT of articles to do so it time to move on. Sorry if I dont have style and tact but Im a three fingered slow typist! Thanks Nancy David Tribe 15:49, 12 December 2006 (CST)
I agree we need to move on, but while I have this article on my mind there are some phrases and sections that I felt need to be imporved. I have attempted to fix as much as I can today so you can move on with the approval process with my support. Much of my editing may seem semantic, but, I do think it is as important that the articles here are written accuratly as well as with style. Chris Day (Talk) 16:00, 12 December 2006 (CST)


Ive made about three word changes. Used particulate in describing Mendels genes, instead of "sort of binary". Ova instead of ovum for reasons of grammar. Two substantive points 1. There is a warming that 36 k is too big for some browsers. As the words are so good (and should be kept IMHO), can this be fixed with shrinking images or eliminating one image! 2. The only substative addition I think might add something is a mention of the RNA world or RNA based catalysis, or RNA regulation as a acklnowledgenent of a major change in concepts. I can craft a few word, dont think it matters eactly what, as long as it provides a glimpse of this previously uncharted territory. Mabe as a link in Further reading? Give me a few (scores of minutes) hours and Ill find a way.

THAT SAID, It has my vote for approval as an editor that did not contribute much at all. As was said earlier, I think, its a tour-de-force. I read it word by word and it held my interest, and I've been reading this stuff since the mid-sixties.

We need to move rather than quibble as we have about 5,000 more fish to fry.

David Tribe 16:44, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Hundreds

  • Currently this article says:
"Not only was that vast project, involving hundreds of laboratories in many different countries, completed ahead of schedule"

Were there really "hundreds" of labs involved the HGP? That means over 200, but I'm not aware it was that many. How are we defining '"involved" in this context? Chris Day (Talk) 15:07, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Change it to "scores" OR "scores, if not hundreds" and be done David Tribe 15:53, 12 December 2006 (CST)
I can live with scores. For reference, the HGP sequencing consortium involved 20 sequencing centres in six countries. [6] Chris Day (Talk) 16:03, 12 December 2006 (CST)
I added in a few words that make hundreds OK but take em out if you want Nancy David Tribe 16:29, 12 December 2006 (CST)
  • Another point. i'm not too keen of the sentence:
"but use this genomic information to trace our own distant ancestry to more primative life forms"

No extant species can be described as primative in the true sense of comparing genomic sequences. They are all modern species. Chris Day (Talk) 15:38, 12 December 2006 (CST)


I think that's Gareth's stuff. But I'd say that even if a lab sent in a sample- that's "involved".I added the word hundreds back in, because I thought it provided more of an image for those who are not personally familiar with laboratory collaborations. I see your point about "primitive", and agree. There probably is a smooth ay to say "to life forms that appear to have evolved such that they are morphologically similar to primitive life forms, and, allow us to infer more detailed hypotheses about the specific path of our own descent - if we make the assumption that genotypic change has been as limited as that of their morphological phenotype." but I can't think of it, offhand. I'd like to make sure I understand your point about biology turning the tables on technology (in a sense) and acting as a catalyst in the human genome project. What specific technological advances were made? Nancy Sculerati MD 16:04, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Actually i was not meaning that biology turned the tables on technology, although that is an interesting perspective. I was trying to elude to the fact that the biology was being driven by the new technology. It would not have happened without it.
I was thinking along the lines that big biology has become possible due to the following; all provided from outside the field of biology.
  1. The ability to sequence massive amounts of DNA cheaply and yet reliably. Applied Biosystems sequencers revolutionised the science along with the automated robots that were developed for the more tedious tasks.
  2. The computer programming skills that allowed the assembly of the sequences and the gene annotation to be automated. The database programming that allowed huge amount of information to be accessible to biologists.
  3. With regard to biological research, the nanotechnology is allowing genome wide northern blots using various ingenious technologies. Also, genome wide analysis of chromatin conformation.
  4. Real time growth kinetics and 3D reconstructions that could only have been dreamed of before the current computer power became available.
It's possible you misinterpreted my original version? I'll let you change it to how you see fit. Chris Day (Talk) 16:16, 12 December 2006 (CST)

So, with Gareth that's 3. I'll e-mail Larry

I'm assuming that Gareth approves, although I have not got him to respond today - he was happy with it in the recent past. I'll e-mail Larry, and we'll put it up. I'm sure it will still have things that could be said better, but as David said, we've all got a lot of other work to do here. Thanks, every one. Nancy Sculerati MD 17:10, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Review

This is an amazingly well-written article. It does not attempt to introduce every aspect of biology equally, but by being selective--focusing on the definition and scope of biology, and then surveying its main areas via its history--it does provide exactly what is wanted from an encyclopedia article about biology, namely, a general introduction that conveys a rough general understanding. A survey of the main areas--alphabetically, say--would convey more information about those areas, but would very probably not do nearly as good a job at introducing biology as a whole. So, thanks, folks, for helping prove the viability of the general premise behind CZ.

The next thing to do--because I want to use this article to illustrate the proposed approval process--is to make the relevant templates. Also, I won't be able to protect the main page until I can make subpages, and I can't make subpages until subpages are turned on. I've already asked the tech guys to turn them on, and since I told them it's top priority, hopefully it will be done by this evening. --Larry Sanger 18:10, 12 December 2006 (CST)

I added near the end (see history) In 2006, not only can we map out how chromosmes have evolved across species, but use these genomic resources to trace our own distant ancestry to other life forms, even so far as the enigmatic traces of a preceding world [1].

We can cut it to just one reference We are at 37 kb

In 2006, not only can we map out how chromosomes have evolved across species, but use these genomic resources to trace our own distant ancestry even so far as the enigmatic traces of a preceding world [18] [19] [20]. However, for all the advances that have been made in the study of living things over the centuries, biology remains a science that has only begun to provide a basis for understanding life. The genome projects, so far from answering all our questions, instead opened up many new ones. One of the biggest surprises was the realisation of how few genes it takes to make a human being - just 28,000 or so, not many more than is needed to make simple animals, and fewer than the number of genes in many plants.

There that cleaner, even if I did write it myself, it even bypasses a previous quibble! David Tribe 18:30, 12 December 2006 (CST) Ill see what image fiddling can do

David Tribe 18:20, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Approval template

I've switched this to the last page in the history that Nancy edited. If you want to nominate a later version, please do so (and discuss). I.e., convince me that you're all comfortable with David Tribe's latest edits...which I haven't even looked at myself, so I have no opinion, I am just the janitor. --Larry Sanger 18:59, 12 December 2006 (CST)

These edits were directed at file compaction. I did discover they give scope for providing better presentation of links.
The Idea of Key pointers to XXXX , oriented to learning is useful as a subpage concept for main subject area in general, rather like an analogy to Ecyclo Britaanica Micropedia.
  • BUT My Firefox browser gives no indication of having problems with the file size at present, and as they say, if it aint broke, why try and fix it?
I'm absolutely delighted with Nancy's and others' efforts (gentle pushing) , and the approval process, and look foward to the next biology approval (maybe Barbara McClintock ? which we'll work with via the workgroup forum David Tribe 19:47, 12 December 2006 (CST)
I would point out that some issues discussed and agreed to above got missed by finalising with Nancy's last edit. I made quite a few changes which i think others agreed to, including repairing typos. David's further edits also tightened the article a lot and I really like the solution to the lists at the end. So I would endorse David Tribe final edit here as the best version to date. Chris Day (Talk) 20:47, 12 December 2006 (CST)
Aha, then the procedure would be to remove the {{ToApprove}} template above and insert it again here with new information. Then either we wait at least 24 hours, or two more editors approve as well. --Larry Sanger 20:54, 12 December 2006 (CST)
Since Nancy approved the template above, I will leave it to her to make the decision to extend to David's last version. Chris Day (Talk) 21:15, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Post Approval Copyedit Final Version Plan by Nancy

Please give me 36 hours to come up with a final version that incorporates Chris and David's stuff. I think I understand what is needed. The last version that I edited is not the one that should be frozen long term for this article. That version is actually not quite written yet. It's just that it never will be written if we keep going, because we hit edict conflicts and we are in a sort of infinite series of half-lifes to the end point (so to speak). I think that we have managed to come together as a team, and I propose that the article is "provisionally approved", which means that it should be frozen now - as I hope it is. On Thursday I will post a version of the last section (the continuing story)on the talk page here and we can all take a look, and make changes on the talk page, agree on that section. Meanwhile, every one should look over the article for typos and double words and that sort of problem. Post your findings here on the talk page. I'll then ask Larry to remove the template and put up the final article, with all those things fixed. Nancy Sculerati MD 21:23, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Nancy, I would suggest you continue to work with the current draft version rather than posting here on the talk page. The way I see it, these approvals just hold a stable version (vandalism free :) ), but the draft remains organic so it can, and should, improve with time. I am assuming there is no final version here if editors agree to new changes.
Larry, on a related note. Now I have see the frozen version with the template, I realise that the template is quite prominent. I was imagining something a lot more subtle. Could we at least have it invisible in the print version? Chris Day (Talk) 21:33, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Chris, everybody changes the draft page and I'm new at the wiki, I just get confused. Don't worry. I think it will work this way. Nancy Sculerati MD 21:40, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Hi Nancy, just to be clear, I think Chris meant this page: Biology/Draft. The policy is that new versions of the article can be developed on that page, while (post-approval) Biology is reserved strictly for approved versions. --Larry Sanger 21:53, 12 December 2006 (CST)
Biology/Draft, is what i was referring to since there is a link to that draft version in the approval template. Besides there are many edits that David and I made that did not make it into the final version. You can see the differences looking at the history here. I feel these are more than just a few typos (the primative discussion above for one) and to do this on the talk page seems to go against the editing mechanisms that are being proposed here in CZ. Chris Day (Talk) 21:57, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Chris, that's exactly what I will include. Just please give me until late Thursday, I am not available today to work. Yes, we need to incorporate those changes and we will. This is not just a proof. Meanwhile, please do a proof on what is published as the approved version - leaving out the last section. Put your findings here on the talk page. I promise that by Friday you should be happy.Nancy Sculerati MD 06:40, 13 December 2006 (CST)

Just to transparently go over this: I wrote to Larry (just before approval) Larry, take a look at the biology article talk page - several editors now approve Biology. Can you make it so that only I can edit it if you agree? I just want to copy edit it and tweak a few words as we have gone over in the discussion page. I'd like to get it done and move on, as David Tribe said- "we have about 5,000 more fish to fry" and if it's open I get into edit conflicts that slow me way down. Please let me know, best, Nancy (meaning not perfect, but generally all right ;)) I wrote that because, as we were working, as I am no expert at "merging" (mean I plain can't do it) conflicting versions when an edit conflict comes up, I was not able to fix it with it on the open wiki. I had no idea that Larry would go back to the last version I edited and approve that one, but I can see -re-reading my e-mail- why he did. It is true that the last section needs a couple of sentences fixed. David Tribe's "compressions" are in the record, and although nice, we apparently do not have a browser problem without them. What I propose -remember this a test case in the approval process- is that we AGREE on a last section, fix the typos, and in some organized fashion, put up the very final approved article- which will be >95% what is up there now. If I go back to the draft- which is open (properly) to every one - instead of trying to fix this through the talk page over 48 hours (or less), then I (and I argue no one) can keep abreast of the changes. That draft page is the incubator for the next article, or perhaps another article. Nancy Sculerati MD 07:03, 13 December 2006 (CST)

As Ive said elsewhere, having been through this 1.5 times I now see how we can develop a workable procedure.
A little Approval process dynamic flexibiliity is no big deal and we can easily revert. We can both keep moving and accomadate the last minute details if we devolpe workable patterns of interaction.
Let me try and explain:
The To approve tag gives us the flexibility (suggested by Larry) to update the link shown in bold in this model:
ToApprove|editor=Nancy Sculerati MD|url=http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Biology&oldid=100012065%7Cgroup=Biology%7Cdate=20061212
in the provisional time af a day or so before it takes effect,I think we should leave it up to the nominating editor to choose the version thats best, provided they dont involve substantive changes
In any case if the "approved" version misses out on important improvements we can , in a dynamivc fashion empower the editor to Action a second To approve tag and just ask her for a reasonable justification that huge issues are not involved before allowing it to go through unimpeded.
Thanks Larry for the next comment which was drafted as I wrote this! David Tribe 15:47, 13 December 2006 (CST)
David makes good points here. I would like to suggest that the draft version should be the canvas where we "develop our workable patterns of interaction". With its built in history and the ability to compare different versions quickly, it is by far the most powerful editing environment. The talk page is obviously important for discussion that is more complex and that requires more input than an edit summary. But, in my view, it is a poor substituite for the actual editing. Chris Day (Talk) 16:50, 13 December 2006 (CST)

Well done everyone. Can we get rid of the WP disclaimer? certainly not appropriate hereGareth Leng 10:56, 13 December 2006 (CST)

I'm drafting a reply to Nancy's latest on the forum, which requires that we basically solve the endgame problem. Gareth, I asked the tech guys re the disclaimer and they say it's automatically tacked onto every article. It's going to require some extra coding to make it turn-offable. --Larry Sanger 15:38, 13 December 2006 (CST)

Seeing how well this went, and anticipating some WP type adversarial editing in the future. What is to stop three other editors from coming along and approving a new draft the next day? And then we would have group edit wars? This group worked well together, but I can see some difficulties with an article like homeopathy for instance. If this has already been answered, just feel free to point me in the right direction. --D. Matt Innis 16:23, 13 December 2006 (CST)

See this forum page. We have no shortage of problems--use your creativity to think of solutions. --Larry Sanger 19:18, 13 December 2006 (CST)

APPROVED Version 1

Congrats

Please accept my heartiest congratulations for approving the first article in CZ. I feel guilty in not having been able to try my hand in this article owing to time constraints. However, I hope to make up for that in near future. Supten 21:26, 12 December 2006 (CST)

Comment on approved vs current draft

Part 1

Here is a summary of the edits in the last paragraph made AFTER the approved version was set. The bold text highlights the differences between the versions and underneath the grey box is the justification for the edits. This is only some of the changes made. There are other changes that were made that I will try and document later. Chris Day (Talk) 16:50, 13 December 2006 (CST)


Before

Not only was that vast project, involving hundreds of laboratories in many different countries, completed ahead of schedule


After

Not only was that vast project, drawing on the inputs of hundreds of laboratories in many different countries, completed ahead of schedule

The Human Genome Project sequencing consortium involved 20 sequencing centres in six countries. [7]. David made the edit above that seems to solve the problem by making the claim of hundreds more vague.


Before

In 2006, we can not only actually map out how chromosmes have evolved across species, but use this information to trace our own distant ancestry to the most primative life forms


After

In 2006, not only can we map out how chromosomes have evolved across species, but use these genomic resources to trace our own distant ancestry to other life forms.

I made the following edits:
"we can not only actually" is hard to read. I have simplified it.
"chromosome" typo corrected.
"information" sounds too dry
"the most primative" is incorrect when comparing genomes since all are from extant modern species.
David then went on to substitute other with the following text even so far as the enigmatic traces of a preceding world. I think this is a thought provoking idea that does tie into to a quote made earlier in the article. Three different references are given and may be excessive.
Only the last reference really addresses how the genome project could help reveal the RNA world; ironically it was published (1989) before the genome projects started. I am assuming there is a better more up to date reference that incorporates genomics into the discussion.


Before

The human genome project, so far from answering all our questions, instead opened up many new ones. One of its biggest surprises was the realisation of how few genes it takes to make a human being


After

The genome projects, so far from answering all our questions, instead opened up many new ones. One of the biggest surprises was the realisation of how few genes it takes to make a human being

This section was rewritten so it focuses on the concept of genome projects rather than the HGP alone.


Before

Understanding And so we come full circle,


After

And so we come full circle,

Clear typo here was removed.


Thus the final text would look like the following:

By the end of the 20th century, progress in molecular biology had given rise to the Human Genome Project, an ambitious vision to sequence the DNA of every single human gene. Not only was that vast project, drawing on the inputs of hundreds of laboratories in many different countries, completed ahead of schedule [2], but we now also have the DNA sequences of many other species with which to compare the human genome. The purposes of these gene sequencing projects have required close collaborations with both engineering and computer sciences, and those efforts have provided new technological tools. In a sense, technology has now been advanced by modern biology (returning the favor).

In 2006, not only can we map out how chromosomes have evolved across species, but use these genomic resources to trace our own distant ancestry even so far as the enigmatic traces of a preceding world (new reference here for RNA world/genomics) However, for all the advances that have been made in the study of living things over the centuries, biology remains a science that has only begun to provide a basis for understanding life. The genome projects, so far from answering all our questions, instead opened up many new ones. One of the biggest surprises was the realisation of how few genes it takes to make a human being - just 28,000 or so, not many more than is needed to make simple animals, and fewer than the number of genes in many plants.

However, it seems that identifying the sequence of our DNA is not enough, to really unravel our genetic code, biologists must start the difficult process of understanding all the ways that these genes can be processed and just how they interact with each other. And so we come full circle, again relying on the traditional fields of biology to unravel the secrets that are not apparent from knowing the genomic sequences alone.

The following sentence "In a sense, technology has now been advanced by modern biology (returning the favor). " also needs to be reworked due to a mix up between nancy and myself discussed above.


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RE enigmatic traces of a preceding world, which I definitely think is work arguing for, one reference is enough and http://www.pnas.org/cgi/content/abstract/86/18/7054 Modern Metabolism as a Palimpsest of the RNA World

is very good, highly relevant, and I can't resist the poetry of Palimpsest in the title.

The concept is from the pre-genomics era and I think it's pointless to link it to genomics David Tribe 18:57, 13 December 2006 (CST)

There is no doubt that the PNAS one is the best (by a large margin). But don't we already link it to genomics in the above sentence? "use these genomic resources to trace our own distant ancestry even so far as..."
I do like the addition since it relates well to the sentence much earlier in the article that refers to the primordial soup paper in Nature ("It is now widely believed that almost four billion years ago, before the first living cells, life consisted of assemblies of self-reproducing macromolecules".[12]". It adds a little more continuity to the article (similar to the baby theme). Chris Day (Talk) 19:13, 13 December 2006 (CST)

1)If we say hundreds of scientists instead of hundreds of laboratories it will be true without changing the rhythym of the words.

2) I'm not sure that the Human Genome project actually did change technology. That might have been my misunderstanding of something Chris Day wrote. It might be more accurate to bring up the technology theme in this way: That unexpected speed was another boon from technology.

3) We need to come up with a sentence that leads into the the last sentence of the article- which I think should remain there. Nancy Sculerati MD 21:27, 13 December 2006 (CST)

I agree with point one. With regard to point 2, I had never intended to say it changed technology, the emphasis of what I wrote got corrupted from subsequent edits. What I originally wrote was: "In a sense we have seen modern biology catalysed by technology" i.e. it would not have been possible without the modern technology. So we are on the same page here. Finally, the last two sentences should definitely stay i made a copy and paste error above but have resotred them. My original lead in sentence was:
"The scope of these projects is to focus on whole systems and has required close collaborations with both engineering and computer sciences to establish new technology. In a sense we have seen modern biology catalysed by technology. However....."
This has now moved up but something along the lines of:
The scope of these projects has been to focus on mining the genomic data for the blueprint of life. However it seems that identifying the sequence of our DNA is not enough, to really unravel our genetic code. Biologists must now start the difficult process of understanding all the ways that these genes can be processed and just how they interact with each other at the level of whole organisms. And so we come full circle, again relying on the traditional fields of biology to unravel probe the secrets that are not apparent from knowing the genomic sequences alone.
New stuff (or recycled) is in black. This might set the scene for big science vs small science and hint at the balance that must be met to move forward. Chris Day (Talk) 22:37, 13 December 2006 (CST)

Part 2

In the Technology advances Biology section I had moved some text around as well as correcting typos and removing adding wikilinks to clean up. Black and strikeouts identify the changes made to the text. Chris Day (Talk) 23:58, 13 December 2006 (CST)

Before

The features of plants and animals, for example, have been understood on an entirely different levels with technological advances that provided new ways to study them. The microscope, modified by Antoni van Leeuwenhoek in the 17th century, revealed details of structure in the bodies of organisms that had never before been suspected. That amorphous material that Harvey could not fathom as the progenitor of organs might have seemed to him to be of a wholly different nature had he the advantage of magnification. One of the new sights that van Leeuwenhoek described were individual ovum and spermatozoa. Being familiar with the theories of Aristotle, and their popular interpretation, he reported that he could actually see homunculi in the heads of the living sperm - an example of even a great scientist perceiving his expectations, rather than what was really there. Science is always influenced by past ideas. No scientist can consider any hypothesis, or analyze any set of experiemental results without using his or her mind, and all the blinkers and biases that come with it - however hard the good scientist tries to shake free and be rational and objective, that mind is both consciously and unconsciously stamped with the culture that produced it.

Not only was the structure of flesh and plants seen in new detail with the microscope, but new types of organisms were also revealed: micro-organisms that could not be detected with the naked eye. [3] And so, like all important technological advances in biology, the microsocope led to new ideas about living things. It was realised that tissues were composed of cells, the field of microbiology was born, and the ground was prepared for the germ theory of disease, an idea that helped bring the traditional practice of western medicine into the field of health science and modern medicine. [remove this gap] Further developments led to the modern compound microscope by the end of the 19th century, with much higher resolution. Cytology included studies of dividing cells, and the chromosomes of the nucleus became recognized as containing the genetic material that lay behind Mendel's laws of inheritance of traits.

Eventually, towards the mid-20th century, electron microscopes were built that could reveal the structure of cells at a magnification of tens of thousands of times. Science differs from religious and political doctrine in at least one major manner – tenets are not to be held sacred forever, but are always there to be questioned and tested. This has proved damaging for many of them, including the homunculus theory of fetal development. With improved optics and the new imaging techniques of scanning and transmission electron microscopes, that "little man" inside the sperm cell vanished forever.

[[Image:Human Sperm.jpg|right|frame|magnified human sperm cells]]

Cell Biology begins

Cell biology began around 1900, with the discovery of the chromosomes and the understanding of mitosis and meiosis. Also, with the re-discovery of Mend al's fundamental law of heredity, genetic linkage analysis allowed the correlation of specific plant or animal traits to be ordered as gene loci in the first genetic maps.[4] The culmination of this work and evidence from cytogenetics, led to the concept of genes as heritable traits that had a physical structure in the chromosomes; in the words of Thomas Morgan "...there is an ever increasing body of information that points clearly to the chromosomes as the bearers of the Mendelian factors, it would be folly to close one's eyes to so patent a relation."[5] [add gap here] With the development of the electron microscope ultra-high power examination of cells was possible and the field of [[cell biology]] began to unravel the inner 'architecture' of cells, discovering discrete organelles that could only be seen well at such high magnification. Closer examination of the structure of the cell was combined with the ability to physically separate out the components of the cells in bulk by density and chemical properties and analyze each fraction using methods from biochemistry and biophysics. The important techniques that allowed this analysis include ultracentrifugation and gel electrophoresis. Advances in this new field of cell biology confirmed the concept that living things were composed of cell units and extended the understanding of just how cells carried out life processes.


After

[[Image:Human Sperm.jpg|left|thumb|250px|magnified human sperm cells]] The features of plants and animals, for example, have been understood on an entirely different level with technological advances that provided new ways to study them. The microscope, modified by Antoni van Leeuwenhoek in the 17th century, revealed details of structure in the bodies of organisms that had never before been suspected. That amorphous material that Harvey could not fathom as the progenitor of organs might have seemed to him to be of a wholly different nature had he the advantage of magnification. One of the new sights that van Leeuwenhoek described were individual ova and spermatozoa. Being familiar with the theories of Aristotle, and their popular interpretation, he reported that he could actually see homunculi in the heads of the living sperm - an example of even a great scientist perceiving his expectations, rather than what was really there. Science is always influenced by past ideas. No scientist can consider any hypothesis, or analyze any set of experimental results without using his or her mind, and all the blinkers and biases that come with it - however hard the good scientist tries to shake free and be rational and objective, that mind is both consciously and unconsciously stamped with the culture that produced it.

Not only was the structure of flesh and plants seen in new detail with the microscope, but new types of organisms were also revealed: micro-organisms that could not be detected with the naked eye. [6] And so, like all important technological advances in biology, the microscope led to new ideas about living things. It was realised that tissues were composed of cells, the field of microbiology was born, and the ground was prepared for the germ theory of disease, an idea that helped bring the traditional practice of western medicine into the field of health science and modern medicine. Further developments led to the modern compound microscope by the end of the 19th century, with much higher resolution allowing the visualisation of dividing cells, and the chromosomes of the nucleus.

Cell Biology begins

Cell biology began around 1900, with the discovery of the chromosomes and the understanding of mitosis and meiosis. Also, with the re-discovery of Mendel's fundamental laws of heredity, genetic linkage analysis allowed the correlation of specific plant or animal traits to be ordered as gene loci in the first genetic maps.[7] The culmination of this work and evidence from cytogenetics, led to the concept of genes as heritable traits that had a physical structure in the chromosomes; in the words of Thomas Morgan "...there is an ever increasing body of information that points clearly to the chromosomes as the bearers of the Mendelian factors, it would be folly to close one's eyes to so patent a relation."[8]

Towards the mid-20th century, with the development of the electron microscope, ultra-high power examination of cells was possible and the field of cell biology began to unravel the inner architecture of cells, discovering discrete organelles that could only be seen well at such high magnification. Closer examination of the structure of the cell was combined with the ability to physically separate out the components of the cells in bulk by density and chemical properties and analyze each fraction using methods from biochemistry and biophysics. The important techniques that allowed this analysis include ultracentrifugation and gel electrophoresis. Advances in this new field of cell biology confirmed the concept that living things were composed of cell units and extended the understanding of just how cells carried out life processes.

Science differs from religious and political doctrine in at least one major manner – tenets are not to be held sacred forever, but are always there to be questioned and tested. This has proved damaging for many of them, including the homunculus theory of fetal development. With the resolving power of the [[electron microscope]] , able to image cell structure at a magnification of tens of thousand-fold, that "little man" inside the sperm cell vanished forever.


Typo's in " Mendal to Mendel", "law to laws", level, experimental, microscope and microbiology should be linked.
Human sperm picture moved up to the top so it does not intrude into the cell biology section.
Typo Mendal to Mendel
Typo law to laws
Add a gap before "With the development of...."
Improve wiki link genetic [[linkage]] to [[genetic linkage]]
Italicise architecture
Remove wikilink for electron microscope
I removed the earlier mention of Mendel and electron microscopes so the text is not chopping around from a chronological perspective. I also moved the religious section to the bottom to bring the 'Technology advances Biology' section to a stronger conclusion.

The final text, that is in the current draft, should read and look similar to the following:


Technology advances Biology

First Glimpses of the Microscopic World

When sperm were first seen under the microscope, it was thought that each contained a perfect miniature human being

The advance of biological thinking depended on the communication of these ideas, and also on technology. Even the communication of ideas in science has depended on technology; in a sense, the printing press was an invention that facilitated the Enlightenment, and today, electronic communication has accelerated the rate of research. The availability of technical tools for experimentation has in a large part determined the course of progress.

magnified human sperm cells

The features of plants and animals, for example, have been understood on an entirely different level with technological advances that provided new ways to study them. The microscope, modified by Antoni van Leeuwenhoek in the 17th century, revealed details of structure in the bodies of organisms that had never before been suspected. That amorphous material that Harvey could not fathom as the progenitor of organs might have seemed to him to be of a wholly different nature had he the advantage of magnification. One of the new sights that van Leeuwenhoek described were individual ova and spermatozoa. Being familiar with the theories of Aristotle, and their popular interpretation, he reported that he could actually see homunculi in the heads of the living sperm - an example of even a great scientist perceiving his expectations, rather than what was really there. Science is always influenced by past ideas. No scientist can consider any hypothesis, or analyze any set of experimental results without using his or her mind, and all the blinkers and biases that come with it - however hard the good scientist tries to shake free and be rational and objective, that mind is both consciously and unconsciously stamped with the culture that produced it.

Not only was the structure of flesh and plants seen in new detail with the microscope, but new types of organisms were also revealed: micro-organisms that could not be detected with the naked eye. [9] And so, like all important technological advances in biology, the microscope led to new ideas about living things. It was realised that tissues were composed of cells, the field of microbiology was born, and the ground was prepared for the germ theory of disease, an idea that helped bring the traditional practice of western medicine into the field of health science and modern medicine. Further developments led to the modern compound microscope by the end of the 19th century, with much higher resolution allowing the visualisation of dividing cells, and the chromosomes of the nucleus.

Cell Biology begins

Cell biology began around 1900, with the discovery of the chromosomes and the understanding of mitosis and meiosis. Also, with the re-discovery of Mendel's fundamental laws of heredity, genetic linkage analysis allowed the correlation of specific plant or animal traits to be ordered as gene loci in the first genetic maps.[10] The culmination of this work and evidence from cytogenetics, led to the concept of genes as heritable traits that had a physical structure in the chromosomes; in the words of Thomas Morgan "...there is an ever increasing body of information that points clearly to the chromosomes as the bearers of the Mendelian factors, it would be folly to close one's eyes to so patent a relation."[11]

Towards the mid-20th century, with the development of the electron microscope, ultra-high power examination of cells was possible and the field of cell biology began to unravel the inner architecture of cells, discovering discrete organelles that could only be seen well at such high magnification. Closer examination of the structure of the cell was combined with the ability to physically separate out the components of the cells in bulk by density and chemical properties and analyze each fraction using methods from biochemistry and biophysics. The important techniques that allowed this analysis include ultracentrifugation and gel electrophoresis. Advances in this new field of cell biology confirmed the concept that living things were composed of cell units and extended the understanding of just how cells carried out life processes.

Science differs from religious and political doctrine in at least one major manner – tenets are not to be held sacred forever, but are always there to be questioned and tested. This has proved damaging for many of them, including the homunculus theory of fetal development. With the resolving power of the electron microscopes, able to image cell structure at a magnification of tens of thousand-fold, that "little man" inside the sperm cell vanished forever.

New approval template

As I understood her, writing on the forums, Nancy said that she wanted folks to give her comments and she would put together a "final final" version on Thursday. What I need to see is a URL where the new version lives. It should be in the page history of Biology/Draft. --Larry Sanger 02:43, 14 December 2006 (CST)

Nancy, i have incorporated everything discussed above into the draft version that can be found here. http://pilot.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Biology/Draft&oldid=100012720 It should be a good starting point for your copy editing, or for others that which to proof read and make adjustments. Chris Day (Talk) 03:22, 14 December 2006 (CST)

I have Gone OVER THE DRAFT\BIO AND SIGNED OFF

Please check it and do the template thing. Thanks for making it so easy to proof!!Nancy Sculerati MD 11:42, 14 December 2006 (CST)

I added the URL to the template above. I did make one grammar change and fixed the formatt for three references, but nothing of substance was changed. Chris Day (Talk) 12:13, 14 December 2006 (CST)

Thanks! Nancy Sculerati MD 12:26, 14 December 2006 (CST)

Done! --Larry Sanger 13:17, 15 December 2006 (CST)

if it is approved, remove the other disclaimer?

can't someone remove the old disclaimer since the article is now approved. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Thomas E Kelly (talkcontribs) .

APPROVED Version 1.01

Spelling

I have fixed several misspellings on the draft, but these need to be fixed here, too. Could someone who can edit this page please assist? Ted Zellers 23:15, 29 December 2006 (CST)


I have put a new Approval template on the latest draft , Catch any other issues in it now and Ill scoop them into the new version David Tribe 21:06, 23 January 2007 (CST)

The European Renaissance and the 'Scientific Method'

I don't think that Harvey can be considered as a man of the Euopean Renaissance. To me what is called the Renaissance stops at the end of the 16th century at the latest. --Martin Kalck 10:18, 16 January 2007 (CST)

Might be best to note that medicine and human anatomy are elsewhere

To save someone future work and newbies confusion, i wonder if it might be best to make the medicine section live now, and also to note just after the title here that Biology at Cit doesn't include Medicine.

Russ 13:13, 23 January 2007 (CST)

Biology Version 1.1 Approval Events

This is a section to Document Biology Approved Version 1.1. It will contain links to the drafts that will create it. This process is about to take place. David Tribe 19:36, 24 January 2007 (CST)

This is the draft version to be approved as Version: Biology (Approved V1.1). I intend to cut and paste into this site and action it with a SYSOP approval unless I get advice on a better precedure to process our records . I will place this text in both the top and draft talk pages. David Tribe 01:25, 25 January 2007 (CST)

Clearly we still need some recognised procedure to make this process more consistent. Is there a new thread on the forums addressing this? Writing a how-to guideline here in CZ and including a link to it in the approval template seems like a critical page for us to get up and running. Chris Day (Talk) 10:58, 25 January 2007 (CST)

Chris, David, Nancy, and all--as you are thick in the middle of using the process, please do try your hand at revising/expanding the systematic exposition of the process, here: CZ:Approval Process. I need your help; don't expect me to do everything when it comes to writing policy and help pages, please! --Larry Sanger 17:09, 25 January 2007 (CST)

Thanks for the link. I will read it and edit as needed. Chris Day (Talk) 17:54, 25 January 2007 (CST)

Redirect page?

I notice that discussion about the same article is going on on Talk:Biology and Talk:Biology/Draft. I think we need to establish a convention, perhaps only temporarily (because Greg Mullane might be finishing up new and improved approval code soon), that when an article is approved, discussion of that article should take place on Talk:Foo/Draft rather than on Talk:Foo, which means the latter should be redirected to the former. Comments? --Larry Sanger 17:09, 25 January 2007 (CST)

I fully agree. Draft is the live version this is page is effectively the archived version.
In addition, it would be useful to have a way to either compare biology with biology/draft, or a way of knowing which was the version in draft that got pasted over to here (so a comparison is possible). I'm not sure that is currently obvious at the draft version without going through the talk page history to find the last approval template. Chris Day (Talk) 17:58, 25 January 2007 (CST)
Strike the last bit. i now see that the templates will be at the top of the draft talk page but commented out. Chris Day (Talk) 00:08, 26 January 2007 (CST)

this is not exactly the same thing as chris is asking for but it is similar idea in comparing the drafts and approved versions. http://forum.citizendium.org/index.php/topic,421.msg3264.html#msg3264 -Tom Kelly (Talk) 00:20, 26 January 2007 (CST)

See top of page . Also updates made to the Approval process manual re reflect this process. David Tribe 01:01, 26 January 2007 (CST)

Spelling

I see that the spelling of "imam" has been corrected for the draft. I suggest it should be corrected for the *.pdf version the new public sees.

It would be useful to say more here and leave a user tag . The editor is aware iman is sometimes spelt iman, but cannot tell from this comment if imam is error or not David Tribe 21:54, 26 January 2007 (CST)

APPROVED Version 1.1

Zebra finch photo

Just a note the zebra finch is not an island specialist, as the text implies, but a continental generalist. Should be removed. --Michael Johnson 18:23, 4 February 2007 (CST)

It's really only there because it's a great picture of a bird with a specialized beak. Open call for submission a great photo (that is licensed such that we can use it) of one of the species of birds that Darwin actually observed in drawing his conclusions. I think we'd all agree that photo would be optimal. Nancy Sculerati MD 19:28, 10 February 2007 (CST)

The problem is that the Zebra Finch is an arid zone generalist, adapted to eat whatever is available. It's beak might be regarded as "typical". The point about Darwin's finches is that their beaks differed so much from a typical finch that Darwin did not identify them as such, and considered them to be members of different families. It was Gould who identified them as finches when mounting the birds back in England. If you wanted to include examples of birds from several different families to compare beaks, that might be useful. But it would not have anything to do with Darwin. As the photo and caption stands it is misleading. --Michael Johnson 15:38, 11 February 2007 (CST)

It is not the best illustration, agreed. Can you help us find a better one? We can be sure to review it before including the picture in another approved addition, and thanks. Nancy Sculerati MD 15:53, 11 February 2007 (CST) .

No unfortunately I do not have access to an image of Darwins finches, although there is one on Wikipedia, so they are around. I suppose it doesn't matter much in that this is not on public view, but it is something that anyone with any knowedge of the Estrildidae would have a giggle about. OTOH I guess the general public wouldn't know the difference. BTW shouldn't there be a policy that any image of an animal, at least in the context of a scientific article, identify the species? --Michael Johnson 17:38, 11 February 2007 (CST)

So, what are you suggesting? Just drop the photo altogther or change the caption to say something about a non-specialist beak? Can you devise a better caption?Nancy Sculerati MD 18:25, 11 February 2007 (CST)

I'd just delete it until you get a better image. To be frank, you could have used a picture of any bird at all instead of the zebra finch, they would have been just about as relevent (or rather, not). After all the whole point of the section is that it is talking about evolution, not finches. --Michael Johnson 19:12, 11 February 2007 (CST)


anatomy

In reference to the following section:

"Some fields of biology focus on living organisms and their interactions within a certain realm of the earth, as in marine biology; others focus on particular aspects of living organisms, like their structure (anatomy) or function (physiology). Studies of animals form the field of zoology, whereas the study of plants is called botany. Medicine and the health sciences apply biology to understanding disease and to improving health."

I would like to replace the word anatomy with morphology, which refers particularly to structure as it applies to both plants and animals, while the term anatomy really applies more to animals and humans in particular; the term zootomy usually reserved for lower animals. I am working on the human skeletal system and believe a more natural order for the flow from biology to the human skeletal system would be: biology > morphology > anatomy > human anatomy > systems of the human body > human skeletal system.

I quote from the Encyclopaedia Britannica: morphology " in biology, the study of the size, shape, and structure of animals, plants, and microorganisms and of the relationships of the parts comprising them. The term refers to the general aspects of biological form and arrangement of the parts of a plant or an animal. The term anatomy also refers to the study of biological structure but usually suggests study of the details of either gross or microscopic structure. In practice, however, the two terms are used almost synonymously.

Typically, morphology is contrasted with physiology, which deals with studies of the functions of organisms and their parts; function and structure are so closely interrelated, however, that their separation is somewhat artificial. Morphologists were originally concerned with the bones, muscles, blood vessels, and nerves comprising the bodies of animals and the roots, stems, leaves, and flower parts comprising the bodies of higher plants. The development of the light microscope made possible the examination of some structural details of individual tissues and single cells; the development of the electron microscope and of methods for preparing ultrathin sections of tissues created an entirely new aspect of morphology—that involving the detailed structure of cells. Electron microscopy has gradually revealed the amazing complexity of the many structures comprising the cells of plants and animals. Other physical techniques have permitted biologists to investigate the morphology of complex molecules such as hemoglobin, the gas-carrying protein of blood, and deoxyribonucleic acid (DNA), of which most genes are composed. Thus, morphology encompasses the study of biological structures over a tremendous range of sizes, from the macroscopic to the molecular.

A thorough knowledge of structure (morphology) is of fundamental importance to the physician, to the veterinarian, and to the plant pathologist, all of whom are concerned with the kinds and causes of the structural changes that result from specific diseases. "

and

anatomy " a field in the biological sciences concerned with the identification and description of the body structures of living things. Gross anatomy involves the study of major body structures by dissection and observation and in its narrowest sense is concerned only with the human body. “Gross anatomy” customarily refers to the study of those body structures large enough to be examined without the help of magnifying devices, while microscopic anatomy is concerned with the study of structural units small enough to be seen only with a light microscope. Dissection is basic to all anatomical research. The earliest record of its use was made by the Greeks, and Theophrastus called dissection “anatomy,” from ana temnein, meaning “to cut up.” "

While I know the Encyclopaedia Britannica, dances around a bit on the distinction between morphology and anatomy, they do stress that morphology is often contrasted with physiology, which is what you are doing on the Biology page. From reading quite a few references it has become apparent to me that, while anatomy once had a broader sense, almost the same as morphology, over time it has come to refer more and more to the morphology of animals and mammals in particular, especially man. I can supply a large number of references, if you wish but I didn't want to overwhelm your discussion page.

I ask this because without the change morphology would be an orphan and, I hope you agree, it is the more general of the two terms, morphology and anatomy. I'm sure you agree that in setting up this online encyclopedia it is important to go always from the general to the particular so that viewers can burrow down in a branchlike structure as far as they wish. I'll admit that sometimes the choices are hard.

Even if you feel that "anatomy" is not a subset of "morphology" and that they are true equals, then you must say "anatomy or morphology" instead of just "anatomy".

You can let me know what you think by posting to the anatomy discussion page.

Thanks, David Hume.

I don't have time to write too much now but I will comment that anatomy of plants is a whole subject in its own right. Distinct from morphology too. So I would disagree that the term is more relevant to animal biology. Chris Day (Talk) 11:21, 17 February 2007 (CST)

Anatomy

I guess I'd hazard that it should be form (anatomy) or structure (morphology). I guess for the level that this article is written it would be appropriate to use "form (anatomy)" as these are more clearly understood by lay readers in their proper sense. I see the point though, it's a sound one - but let's think of the reader first. On balance I'd say that Anatomy should stay. Make any change on the draft but lets not revisit approval until substantial changes have accrued. In the meantime I think there are articles that are approaching approval that deserve closer attention than this one, for now.

Gareth Leng 03:31, 20 February 2007 (CST)

MORPHOLOGY vs. ANATOMY -- OED2

MORPHOLOGY I. Simple uses. 1. Biol. The branch of biology that deals with the form of living organisms and their parts, and the relationships between their structures. Formerly: spec. the comparison of the forms of organisms and their parts in order to identify homologous structures (cf. quots. 1853, 1859, 1872). 1828 R. KNOX tr. H. Cloquet Syst. Human Anat. 2 Descriptive Anatomy..is itself capable of being divided into the Particular Anatomy of Organs, or Morphology, and the Anatomy of Regions, or Topographical Anatomy, if we may use the expression. 1853 T. H. HUXLEY in Philos. Trans. Royal Soc. 143 29 The morphology of the Cephalous Mollusca is a subject which has been greatly neglected. No Savigny has determined the homologies of their different organs, and so furnished the only scientific basis for anatomical and zoological nomenclature. 1859 J. R. GREENE Man. Animal Kingdom: Protozoa Introd. 17 By some the word ‘morphology’ is employed in a restricted sense, to signify the study of homologous organs. 1872 R. G. LATHAM Dict. Eng. Lang., Morphology, doctrine of the fundamental identity of the parts constituting the flower..and fruit..with the leaf. 1904 W. L. H. DUCKWORTH Morphol. & Anthropol. ii. 14 This application of the principles of Morphology to the special case of Man constitutes the essence of Physical Anthropology. 1946 A. NELSON Princ. Agric. Bot. iii. 20 In both morphology and anatomy the relationships in space of the several parts..are important. 1992 P. J. BOWLER Fontana Hist. Environmental Sci. (BNC) 340 Morphology was a laboratory-based subject that did not encourage detailed study of how animals adapted to their local environment. 2. orig. and chiefly Science. Shape, form, external structure or arrangement, esp. as an object of study or classification. Also: a particular shape, form, or external structure, esp. of (a part of) an organism, landform, etc. 1844 Philos. Trans. Royal Soc. 134 303 The morphology of the thyroid gland. 1894 Jrnl. Physiol. 17 81 (heading) The morphology and distribution of the wandering cells of Mammalia. 1895 N. STORY-MASKELYNE (title) Crystallography: a treatise on the morphology of crystals. 1921 Geogr. Rev. 11 155 (heading) Morphology of the Altai Mountains. 1937 Rep. Brit. Assoc. Advancem. Sci. 373 (heading) A comparative study of the morphology of the North Downs and the Chiltern Hills. 1950 Jrnl. Gen. Physiol. 33 651 Two separate lines of approach..were required: a study of the functional behavior of the [nerve] fibers, and a study of their morphology. 1954 M. BERESFORD Lost Villages 23 In the study of village morphology..an opportunity of seeing a medieval village plan without any of the accretions of later building. 1964 R. C. EVANS Introd. Crystal Chem. (ed. 2) xi. 184 Before the discovery of X-ray diffraction, crystals could be classified only on the basis of morphology, and in terms of their symmetry were assigned to one or other of the thirty-two classes. 1965 E. GURR Rational Use of Dyes in Biol. I. 107 We can refer to the shape and/or size of a molecule as its morphology. 1971 W. A. PRYOR in R. E. Carver Procedures Sedimentary Petrol. vii. 142 Quantitative analysis of grain morphology requires measurement of particle radii, diameters, and lengths. 1990 Protein Engin. 4 23/1 Amphioxus, an invertebrate animal with the morphology of a fish.


ANATOMY I. The process, subjects, and products of dissection of the body. 1. The artificial separation of the different parts of a human body or animal (or more generally of any organized body), in order to discover their position, structure, and economy; dissection. 1541 R. COPLAND Guydon's Quest. Cyrurg., Anathomy is called ryght dyuysyon of membres done for certayne knowleges. 1543 TRAHERON Vigo's Chirurg. (1586) 430 Anatomie..signifieth the cutting up of a mans bodie, or of some other thing. 1667 MARVELL Corr. 203 Wks. 1872 II. 403 As if a man should dissect his own body, and read the anatomy lecture. 1688 J. CLAYTON in Phil. Trans. XVII. 990 Dr. Moulin and my self..made our Anatomies together..we shew'd to the Royal Society, that all Flat-bill'd Birds..had three Pair of Nerves. 1712 ADDISON Spect. No. 275 1 Curious observations which he had lately made in an anatomy of an human body. b. with quick, live: Vivisection. Obs. 1651 N. BIGGS New Dispens. Pref. 7 Where have we constant reading upon either quick or dead Anatomies? 1651 Life of Father Sarpi (1676) 16 He had formerly cut in pieces a number of living Creatures with his own hands to make Anatomies. 1668 CULPEPPER & COLE tr. Bartholinus' Anat. II. vi. 101 In Live Anatomies we can hardly perceive that the one is hotter then the other. 2. concr. a. A body (or part of one) anatomized or dissected, so as to show the position and structure of the organs. Hence b. A body or ‘subject’ for dissection. Obs. 1540 T. RAYNALDE Birth of Mankinde (1634) Prol. 3 As though yee were present at the cutting open of Anatomy of a dead woman. 1598 B. JONSON Every Man in his Humour IV. vi, They must ha' dissected, and made an Anatomie o' me. 1602 DEKKER Satirom. 197 Carving my poore labours, Like an Anotomy. 1611 TOURNEUR Ath. Trag. V. ii. 146 His body when 'tis dead For an Anatomie. 1611 DONNE in Coryat Crudities, Worst malefactors..Doe publique good cut in Anatomies. 1691 WOOD Ath. Oxon. II/610 He intended to have her made an Anatomy. 1751 CHAMBERS Cycl., Anatomy is sometimes used to denote the subject to be anatomized. 3. A model of the body, showing the parts discovered in dissection. 1727-51 CHAMBERS Cycl. s.v., An human anatomy in plaster of Paris, representing a man standing upright, with his skin flea'd off. 1753 Cycl. Supp., Who has not seen the waxwork Anatomy?

It seems 'morphology' more for form; 'anatomy' more for details of structure. But still iffy. Anthony.Sebastian (Talk) 14:59, 20 February 2007 (CST)

The problem, as I see it, is that anatomy and morphology are both different types of biological structure. The most accurate way to write the sentence is:
"others focus on particular aspects of living organisms, like their structure (anatomy and morphology) or function (physiology)."
Does this suit everyone? Chris Day (Talk) 15:17, 20 February 2007 (CST)
It's certainly inclusive! :-) But it does not suit me- the truth is that anatomy and morphology are broadly used as synonyms by biologists. Like crimson and scarlet, it is possible to find specific references that distinguish them, but that is rather misleading. All I can say is that I have taught college level biology courses in a university and given anatomy lectures in a medical school, and I do not agree that one is recognized as a subset of the other, or that both need to be mentioned. I do feel that the narrative writing should be crisp and engaging, and that to have to add in and morphology is not an improvement. Do we even have two different articles? David, I think your interest is great and I would be pleased to write some bone articles with you- but the Encyclopedia Brittanica just is not an authoratative source for this stuff. The hierarchy you propose here and in anatomy is not one that I agree with. Perhaps you could start an article on a favorite bone- how about: human skull- I can help you there! ;-) Nancy Nancy Sculerati MD 15:28, 20 February 2007 (CST)
addendum: I see that there is an anatomy and a distinct morphology article- basically both written by David Hume, and both written to support his view. Perhaps the other biology editors can look them over and comment/edit. I do not want to be confrontational, but I do believe that we cannot sacrifice truth to politeness. As we all know, I am often wrong-but never in doubt! Still, I do not believe that these articles are accurate as written. Nancy Sculerati MD 15:33, 20 February 2007 (CST)
Botanists do not use them as synonyms, I can't speak for zoologists or the medical profession. Certainly i would not regard one as a subset of the other. Chris Day (Talk) 15:43, 20 February 2007 (CST)

Request

As part of our approval process, we should redirect Talk:Approved article to Talk:Approved article/Draft, to avoid discussion being carried on in two places. Shouldn't we?

Unless you have worked out a different solution (tell me if you have, please!), may I ask someone to (1) create an archive (see User talk:Larry Sanger for an example) of this page, (2) place both a link to that archive and the most recent entries from this page on Talk:Biology/Draft, and (3) entirely replace the contents of Talk:Biology (i.e., this page), which should have been copied either to the archive or to Talk:Biology/Draft, with this: #REDIRECT [[Talk:Biology/Draft]]

For extra credit, update the article approval process page with these steps.  :-)

Of course, if you have some way of understanding what goes on Talk:Biology and Talk:Biology/Draft, and you want to make that a general rule for the whole of CZ, please enlighten me!

--Larry Sanger 16:00, 20 February 2007 (CST)

Larry, check Talk:RNA interference talk. That's the way David had me do the last one. Matt Innis (Talk) 16:09, 20 February 2007 (CST)
It's better to have a redirect page the problem with a note directing people to the new talk page is that some users will not notice it. Chris Day (Talk) 16:19, 20 February 2007 (CST)
[edit clash] I prefer having one talk page only. With respect to the archive, I suggest we use the move function to preserve the edit history of this page at the archive too. This is important since any links to this page will automatically be redirected to the appropriate archive page. Currently there is already one archive for biology, but it was only cut and pasted from this talk page. The edit history for those edits are still associated with this page. I suggest we move this whole page to Talk:Biology Archive 1. Then copy and paste the content from Talk:Biology_archive_1 to the top of the new archive at Talk:Biology Archive 1. Then we should delete the old archive. Any continuing discussion can then be transfered to the Talk:Biology/Draft page. Chris Day (Talk) 16:15, 20 February 2007 (CST)

So, am I right that there just isn't any rhyme or reason to the current confusing situation? --Larry Sanger 16:29, 20 February 2007 (CST)

Yes, you're right. In the long term it is not viable to have two talk pages for every approved article. Once the approval has occured the article talk page should be archived and redirected to the draft talk page AND fully protected so it cannot be changed at a later date. If you unlock the move function then we can proceed. Unless others have a strong argument for not doing this? Chris Day (Talk) 16:39, 20 February 2007 (CST)

It's fine with me. Nancy Sculerati MD 16:44, 20 February 2007 (CST)

Sounds perfect. That way future editors will still have access to previous discussions and decisions on the same page and no-one will make the mistake of posting on the wrong page. I would ask that you outline the steps well for those of us who have do it. Matt Innis (Talk) 18:52, 20 February 2007 (CST)

Chris, if you want to have at it--please do! --Larry Sanger 09:27, 21 February 2007 (CST)

OK, someone will have to make the move option available. Or Matt could do it, he knows what to do. 10:30, 21 February 2007 (CST)
I'll give it a shot, keep an eye on me:) Matt Innis (Talk) 10:50, 21 February 2007 (CST)
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