Talk:Amnesty International

First (instructor) evaluation comments

Hi Michelle,

Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. Since you've only begun developing the "History" section, I'll limit my comments to that; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the other sections:

• You might restructure the "History" section so that the "Founding" subsection comes first; then create additional subsections to organize your account of AI's history since the early 1960s.
• Most importantly, your encyclopedia entry should be an explanation of what the organization is all about in your own words. Way too much of what appears there now is drawn verbatim from Amnesty International's website ([1]).

Shamira Gelbman 13:45, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

Second (peer) evaluation comments

I echo many of professor gelbmaans comments. When I wrote my opinion essay I used a google news search and it was very helpful. This tool might help out when you begin constructing your conflict section of your article. You have a lot of good information and a solid base you just need to continue to develop your piece and develop more information resources

=Amnesty vs. other organizations?

In the human rights area, what are the differences among AI, HRW, and HR Now, to name a few? Howard C. Berkowitz 09:32, 13 September 2010 (UTC)

Itallics

There are a lot of titles in this article, of publications and events, starting with 'Appeal for Amnesty 1961' - should these be in itallics? It would certainly make things easier to read. If not itallics then 'single' or "double" quotation marks? David Finn 08:49, 13 September 2010 (UTC)

Even more, if they are to be mentioned, there needs to be some neutral description of them, and preferably a citation of the primary document. Policy-influencing organizations sometimes issue titles of events that are really less than slogans.Howard C. Berkowitz 09:32, 13 September 2010 (UTC)

A lot of this will be citable, but much of the article seems like it has been pasted from another source and I think this is what is making our article seem non-neutral. I started to rewrite some of it but I really need to decide which format to use for those titles. David Finn 09:47, 13 September 2010 (UTC)