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Hey, I read over your article [[Prohibition of alcohol, United States]] because I saw you had [[CZ:Feedback_Requests|requested feedback]]. It's a pretty good start, overall, briefly covering the important aspects of the topic. I did make some edits for grammar and clarity. One thing I think you should consider is renaming the article, because the current title is quite awkward. How about [[Prohibition in the United States]], or simply [[Prohibition]]? I don't think you need to clarify "of alcohol", because the term almost always refers to the historic prohibition of alcohol. --[[User:Carl Jantzen|Carl Jantzen]] 15:46, 22 August 2007 (CDT) | Hey, I read over your article [[Prohibition of alcohol, United States]] because I saw you had [[CZ:Feedback_Requests|requested feedback]]. It's a pretty good start, overall, briefly covering the important aspects of the topic. I did make some edits for grammar and clarity. One thing I think you should consider is renaming the article, because the current title is quite awkward. How about [[Prohibition in the United States]], or simply [[Prohibition]]? I don't think you need to clarify "of alcohol", because the term almost always refers to the historic prohibition of alcohol. --[[User:Carl Jantzen|Carl Jantzen]] 15:46, 22 August 2007 (CDT) | ||
:I submitted an enhanced photo for the article. See talk page. --[[User:Robert W King|Robert W King]] 15:53, 22 August 2007 (CDT) | |||
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Prohibition
Hey, I read over your article Prohibition of alcohol, United States because I saw you had requested feedback. It's a pretty good start, overall, briefly covering the important aspects of the topic. I did make some edits for grammar and clarity. One thing I think you should consider is renaming the article, because the current title is quite awkward. How about Prohibition in the United States, or simply Prohibition? I don't think you need to clarify "of alcohol", because the term almost always refers to the historic prohibition of alcohol. --Carl Jantzen 15:46, 22 August 2007 (CDT)
- I submitted an enhanced photo for the article. See talk page. --Robert W King 15:53, 22 August 2007 (CDT)