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::In many places, the wording and sentence structure are not clear. If you are still active on this article, leave me a note here, and I will suggest more extensive changes and development of the article. [[User:James Davis|James Davis]] 20:29, 29 October 2007 (CDT) | ::In many places, the wording and sentence structure are not clear. If you are still active on this article, leave me a note here, and I will suggest more extensive changes and development of the article. [[User:James Davis|James Davis]] 20:29, 29 October 2007 (CDT) | ||
Note: A month having passed since my inquiry above, and having had no word from Astorina, I've done a complete rewrite of the article. I had hoped to seek some clarification of the obscure language in the original version so that I could build on it rather than rewrite. But Astornai did not respond so I've made a fresh start. [[User:James Davis|James Davis]] 14:35, 13 November 2007 (CST) | |||
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I attempt to write an introduction that attempt to the origin of astrology, your initial proeminency and, after, your fall in descredit. It is necessary still write mor about astrology itself, your structure and different branches. --L'Astorina 13:26, 02 October 2007 (CST)
- Hi Astorina, I've fixed some but not all of the language problems with the article. I take it, that English is not your native language?
- In many places, the wording and sentence structure are not clear. If you are still active on this article, leave me a note here, and I will suggest more extensive changes and development of the article. James Davis 20:29, 29 October 2007 (CDT)
Note: A month having passed since my inquiry above, and having had no word from Astorina, I've done a complete rewrite of the article. I had hoped to seek some clarification of the obscure language in the original version so that I could build on it rather than rewrite. But Astornai did not respond so I've made a fresh start. James Davis 14:35, 13 November 2007 (CST)