Talk:Health consequences of obesity

Lowri Phillips 21:00, 5 October 2009 (UTC) Amelia Sheldon 17:08, 8 October 2009 (UTC) Katherine Laura Greenall 15:08, 13 October 2009 (UTC) Rachael White 13:51, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

Very good start, you've got a nice selection of reviews here.Gareth Leng 09:38, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

I agree! Just a minor point: Check the format of your references, Journal titles should be in italic and not within " " for instance.

Nicholas, I thought you wanted to work on diabetes? If so you should join the Diabesity article, if you have changed your mind let me know. Celine Caquineau 10:48, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

Any news from Hannah? Celine Caquineau 09:57, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

Lowri asked me "Should I be aiming to discuss specific experiments and how they have contributed to what we know?" I answeresd "For an encyclopedia article, it's important that the "facts" that you decide to give should be solidly established, - if you find them in prominent review articles, it's a good indication that these are "established" facts - and you can use one or more reviews as references. In an encyclopedia article you would probably only describe an individual study if it was exceptionally important. An encyclopedia article is a display of breadth of knowledge more than depth. For the exam you'll need to show breadth and depth.Gareth Leng 16:50, 18 October 2009 (UTC)

I advise you to upload your work regularly, the structure of your article could be there for instance. And remember to be consistent with the format of your references in the bibliography page. Hannah I need to know if you are still here! Celine Caquineau 14:45, 21 October 2009 (UTC)