Talk:Crystal Palace/Draft

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Approval area

I have placed the ToApprove template on this article by request from Approvals Manager Nancy Sculerati for History editor Richard Jensen using the Individual Editor rules. --Matt Innis (Talk) 20:16, 4 June 2007 (CDT)

The Crystal Palace lecture

Did you ever heard (or hear of) the famous Crystal Palace lecture by David Owens, a professor at Harvard and my housemaster at Winthrop House? It started out as just one of the lectures in his course on, I guess, Modern English History or some such, then became so famous that it had to be moved to a much larger venue than his usual classroom. Hundreds of outsiders would come to hear it and watch the slide show.... Hayford Peirce 10:59, 3 June 2007 (CDT)

Hi, Hayford. No, I hadn't heard of the David Owens lectures. The CP is an endlessly fascinating topic, though; my first encounter with its historical symoblism was in All That Is Solid Melts into Air: The Experience of Modernity, by Marshall Berman. Since then, I've collected books and ephemera on the Palace, and visited the site many times. Much of what I plan here will draw from my own Crystal Palace site. Best, Russell Potter 18:39, 3 June 2007 (CDT)

I guess his name was Owen, not Owens. Here's a paragraph from a 1954 Harvard Crimson article about him: "His reputation for humor is at once Owen's greatest asset and a liability which he is most likely to deplore. Like the Hogarth engravings on his office walls, Owen's lectures are liberally sprinkled with bits of historical paraphernalia, each so interesting in itself that it is likely to detract from the whole. The "Crystal Palace" lecture, featuring lantern slides of a once famous Victorian exhibition, along with Owen's barbed asides, is an example. "I'm sorry it has developed into a kind of stunt or parlor trick. It really has a value in depicting the Victorian era," he remarked in justification." It was still going strong in 1964.... Hayford Peirce 19:36, 3 June 2007 (CDT)

The Crystal Palace as anthropological milestone

Great topic. I first learned about the Crystal Palace as an undergrad in anthropological theory class. The prologue of Victorian Anthropology by George Stocking focuses on the palace and its significance as a marker of change in Victorian views of "civilization." I've still got the book, so I'll reread that section and post notes on anything that might add to this article. --Eric Winesett 21:49, 3 June 2007 (CDT)

Eric, delighted to find another Citizen with an interest in the Crystal Palace! The Stocking volume is an excellent one (always glad to hear of a student who didn't sell back a book!). The Berman title I mentioned above also uses the Palace as a kind of metaphor for both Victorian sensibilities and early modernity. Please go ahead and add what seems important -- I have created a section at the end for the cultural significance of the Palace, which may be a likely place to begin. Cheers, Russell Potter 22:54, 3 June 2007 (CDT)

p.s. Would you have a look at my own Crystal Palace site? I cannot, under CZ policy, add a link to my own site on the links pages, but if you or another editor or author deem it worthy, you can add it under "External Links." Thanks, Russell Potter 11:54, 4 June 2007 (CDT)

Style issues

I started doing some copyediting, and quickly realized that adhering to the Chicago Manual of Style would change a lot of capitalization in the article. Chicago style does not capitalize words like park, palace, commissioner, or exhibition when they are not used in a title. So "the Crystal Palace is in Hyde Park," but "the palace is in the park." Then again, this is a British subject, so the rules may be different if we prefer British English. I the standard in British English to capitalize in such a way? --Eric Winesett 22:14, 4 June 2007 (CDT)

Eric, thanks for the note, and your thoughtful and painstaking copyediting here. The thing is, I do not think that CZ as of yet has adopted any particular manual of style, so I think we will have to use a more general set of guidelines for the present, one tailored to overall consistency within articles and between them, keeping the limts of wikicode in mind.

My sense here is that, when referring to a specfic Park (such as Hyde Park), a later reference to either should be to "the Park" (as in "there were concerns about the impact on the Park"). It's the usage I've seen in both US and UK references on the Crystal Palace; perhaps it's because Hyde Park, like Green Park and St. James's Park, is one of the Royal Parks of London, and names not simply a patch of green, but a special type of legal zone. With the Commission and its Commissioners, again, this seems to be regularly capitalized whether or not their full name is given, since it's in essence a shortened form of the body's proper name, "The Royal Commission for the Exhibition of 1851" (again, maybe Royal entities rank higher in "majuscule" letters!).

But in other areas, even though it's a UK topic, since we're US writers in a US-based encyclopedia, it seems to me that American usage should generally prevail. The one grey area I see is the late reference to the "National Sports Centre" -- which is what it is literally called, and how spelt -- but of course the US standard would call for "National Sports Center."

You should copyedit as you see fit, in any case, so long as the practice is internally consistent; these are just my thoughts. Russell Potter 22:25, 4 June 2007 (CDT)

I don't have strong feelings either way. I am going by Chicago style based on the guidelines in the CZ:Article Mechanics article. I only copyedited one section (Planning and construction), so it's out of sync from the others at the moment, though there were inconsistencies already. This is a great article in terms of content, but I don't think the version up for approval is ready. There are some other CZ style issues that need attention like section title capitalization. (Only the fist word capitalized unless proper nouns; see approved articles.) Getting to that now. --Eric Winesett 12:03, 5 June 2007 (CDT)

Well, Eric, I have to say I disagree with you about the article not being ready for approval. We have never held up, so far as I know, any nominated article purely for copyediting reasons; there is always room for further improvement on the Draft page. The inconsistencies you observe strike me as minor, and looking over the rest of the entry, I do not see many more left to address.

Of course, as the primary author, I may be biased! But part of the reason we have a fairly lengthy five day approval process is so that issues such as copyediting can be addressed. I've already had at least three other people go through it and, they found only one small correction of substance and three or four typographical errors; I myself caught a few others. You are using a very fine-toothed comb here, and that's certainly, in the long run, a good thing; you have done much already to improve the text. Yet there is no need to resolve every single stylistic inconsistency prior to approval.

So I feel strongly that such issues should not hold up approval beyond the five-day period (this will of course be up to the nominating editor to decide). I am grateful for your efforts, and if you choose do further copyediting, that will of course be welcome. Russell Potter 12:47, 5 June 2007 (CDT)

p.s. I am unclear as to why you cut all the section about the Palace grounds at the end? There was no reference to this in your comment line; I have restored the text pending some further discussion.

p.p.s. On the other side: thanks for adding "glass and iron structure" -- I think that greatly improved the first sentence! Russell Potter 13:07, 5 June 2007 (CDT)

p.p.p.s. -- I switched to lowercase on non-proper words other than the first word in section titles. I am looking for other inconsistencies, but don't see any really clear ones! The only other thing I can see is "Palace" which is, and I think should be, capitalized throughout. Russell Potter 13:14, 5 June 2007 (CDT)

Russell, something very strange happened between my two edits from earlier today. If you take a look in the history comparing my two edits,[1] you can see that when I added "a glass and iron structure" (and that's all I did in that edit), somehow all my changes from the previous edit were reverted and parts of the article were deleted. I have no idea how that happened. (A bug?) I wonder if there are other things missing.

Again, I do think the article is great. I do disagree -- to an extent -- about articles being held up for copyediting issues. All I want is someone with an eye and ear for copyediting to read through the final version before the approved tag goes on. My reasoning is that if we are trying to hold CZ up as more professional and scholarly than Wikipedia, our articles shouldn't have simple mistakes that are easy to fix. Things like capitalization are not a huge issue, but, for example, the contraception (medical methods) article got approved with more than one instance of subject-verb disagreement. And with the system we have, the approved version still has those mistakes (and others). --Eric Winesett 22:08, 5 June 2007 (CDT)

Eric, thanks for your latest. Yes, that was odd, I do not know why the section at the end was dropped, and some edits reverted -- a glitch for sure. I restored the missing paragraph and I think I've caught the other odd reverts.

In any case, I heartily agree with you that our article should be top-notch! Consistency in capitalization is important, yes, but of course grammatical problems would be far more embarassing! I spent some years before graduate school as a copyeditor, and I've worked with copyeditors on my own scholarly books and articles, so I do truly value and appreciate the attention to detail. In my current post, I teach English Grammar every semester to future English teachers, and so I have a particular stake in this area!

My feeling, on careful re-reading, is that this article, as it stands, has no problems with style, usage, and grammar. Capitalization, and (as one recent edit disclosed) an unnecessary apostrophe, can be tended to; I have already done this with the section heads, as you can see. If there is anything more serious that that, I trust that you and others will catch it, but my own eye cannot detect any remaining errors of a serious kind. In this article, I'm an author, but I'm also an Editor here at CZ. The ultimate decision here lies with the Approval editor, as all such entries are reviewed by another editor before final approval. (by the by, if you pass along the error you have noted in contraception (medical methods) , I am certain the editors there would swiftly put it into the next version).

The careful attention you are giving this and other entries can continue even after the first approval, should a minor error be caught, but we also have a priority at CZ to get solid, comprehensive, readable entries to Approved status (and beyond!) in a timely manner. I would hold up this entry as far stronger than the Wikipedia's -- let's make it stronger still! -- but let's keep it moving along as we do.

Russell Potter 22:26, 5 June 2007 (CDT)

Russell, I think we're on the same page. BTW, I went back just now and compared that odd reversion edit to the current article and caught a couple of links that were left out. --Eric Winesett 01:14, 6 June 2007 (CDT)

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Awesome article. Well done, I surely couldn't find much in the way of copyedits, but then again I may have just gotten tied up in the story ;-) Matt Innis (Talk) 22:17, 4 June 2007 (CDT)

Matt, thanks for the feedback! The Crystal Palace has been a lifelong interest, so I've really had fun putting this together! Russell Potter 22:25, 4 June 2007 (CDT)

I read about this Palace in Berman's All That Is Solid Melts into Air for a course Honors Sense of Place Across Time[2] but did not know all these fascinating details. Definitely excellent work, Russell! Stephen Ewen 00:01, 6 June 2007 (CDT)

Before and After photos

Who owns these? How can they be added? Stephen Ewen 00:12, 6 June 2007 (CDT)

Hi Stephen, and many thanks for your good work on this entry! Ironically enough, the two images you mention, though they are on my own website, are in a bit of a grey area, permissions-wise. I scanned them from the Illustrated London News of December, 1936. The ILN is defunct, and what remains of it is owned by Dodi Fayed (whose son was Princess Di's late boyfriend); the one asset they are pushing is an ILN Photo Library, selling images from back issues. So any post-1923 ILN images would probably have to be sourced through them. I play it a bit fast and loose on my own webpages, since I'm ostensibly using them there solely for educational purposes, but if the ILN were to contact me, I'd probably have to set up some sort of licensing or remove them.

They have only scanned about 10%of their vast (since 1849) archive, and only the later stuff is still under copyright, but perhaps we could approach them about a collective arrangement using their imagery -- till then, these two (I agree, excellent) photos had probably best wait. Russell Potter 08:18, 6 June 2007 (CDT)

dangling modifier

I explained in my edit summary[3] that I was fixing a dangling modifier. That's just good grammar. The sentence I'm fixing is jarring. Let me explain: before I changed it the sentence read: "Originally envisioned by the Building Commissioners for the Great Exhibition as an enormous, permanent building of brick and stone, the first proposals submitted were massive indeed." This sentence's subject is "the first proposals." The modifying phrase "Originally envisioned by the Building Commissioners for the Great Exhibition as an enormous, permanent building of brick and stone" modifies the subject, but the Commissioners didn't envision proposals, they envisioned the building. So this sentence's modifier dangles. I fixed the sentence to read: "The Building Commissioners originally envisioned the palace for the Great Exhibition as an enormous, permanent building of brick and stone, and its first submitted proposals were massive indeed." No modifying phrase, no dangling, no change in meaning, and it sounds fine. Nathaniel Dektor 20:21, 7 June 2007 (CDT)

Would it still work if we took off the "The"?

• Building Commissioners originally envisioned the palace for the Great Exhibition as an enormous, permanent building of brick and stone, and its first submitted proposals were massive indeed.

I think that would handle my urge change it back. Matt Innis (Talk) 20:30, 7 June 2007 (CDT)

I am going to have a fresh stab at this -- though I understand the initial issue, some of these solutions seem worse than the problem. Russell Potter 20:32, 7 June 2007 (CDT)

By George, I think I've got it! -- have a look at the results. Russell Potter 20:35, 7 June 2007 (CDT)

Well, shiver me timbers, it works for me (that is if you have to start it with "The":) You two are obviously more versed at this than I (or is that me:). What does Nathaniel think? Matt Innis (Talk) 20:48, 7 June 2007 (CDT)

the former dangling modifier

A few thoughts. Are the commissioners designated in some official way worth preserving? For example, if each held the office designated (back then) as "Building Commissioner" we'd want to keep that. Maybe "Commissioner" is the more historically "authentic"--I have no idea. In my sentence I just kept what was there. If we don't mean to communicate a formal office holder, then maybe lower casing "The commissioners" or just "commissioners" is indeed better. With the current sentence, though, I'd drop the word "notion" at the end: "The Commissioners originally envisioned the building that would house the Great Exhibition as a substantial, permanent structure of brick and stone, and the initial proposals reflected this." Or how about the tad more economical: "The Commissioners originally envisioned the building that would house the Great Exhibition as a substantial, permanent structure of brick and stone, which the initial proposals reflected." Nathaniel Dektor 21:31, 7 June 2007 (CDT)

More economical is harder to follow. Too dense. Nancy Sculerati 21:34, 7 June 2007 (CDT)